This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2009-09-13 00:51:03 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Two views of dna

Most chemists have      discovered that a title will not get      them very far into its core, Samuel. Could it be      a builded place, or could it be      an ion, minus switching on, Samuel? Give or take,      what is between is what they seek      with hands too full to feel it whole, Samuel.
Copyright © September 2009 Mark Andrew Hislop

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2009-09-18 12:20:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
MAH, Like the repetition of "Samuel." Like the DNA-like structure. Not being very scientific, the allusion (and I'm sure you're making some allusions) and therefore some of the power of this is beyond me. I sense I dimension to this that is beyond my powers of perception. But what I do perceive I like. MSS

This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-09-13 10:22:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I've only guesses about your illusion to "Samuel". You might fix that. At the times of our own exploration we become aware of the imperfections, even the laughable, in modern views of science. If we go deeper we find such over-specialization like dividing one complete pursuit of Nature's wonder into arbitrary fragment like that of "physics" and "chemistry". Your poem is an early on growth of awareness of this. And broader, that of all authority imposing on us at any one time...won of frail mortal consequence, my budding nihilist. "with hands too full/to feel it whole" is your best and superlative line/lines. With plate still far too full, the leap into conclusion is obviously unearned. As it is with all things human upon this planet. JCH
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