This Poem was Submitted By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2009-12-12 13:11:06 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Laugh a Little Lighter I'm a little older now. I don't laugh at Gilligan anymore
but there are plenty of things to keep me amused
if I laugh a little lighter.
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Ah, my hair that hung long and straight
blond bounty hanging at my waist
a natural blush and gleaming teeth
ahh yes, I laugh and remember
I was ever so light on my feet!
~~ ~~ ~~
And now?...
My cheeks appear to be part of my chin
and all these lines have ruined my skin
my head once crowned a gorgeous neck
but that has become a part of my chest.
I laugh a little lighter now, and turn
another page....
time goes by so fast!
Too much pressure on my knees
I wet my pants when I sneeze
But when I can, I stand up straight
its nice to see, I do have a waist
But then my legs get in the way and
I'm not sure if I'm
wearing shoes today.
There's still a little twinkle in my eye
and all these wrinkles are just laugh lines
I have lots and lots of tales to tell
I know my grandchildren well
and we all laugh a little lighter now.
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Copyright © December 2009 Ellen K Lewis
Additional Notes:
I'm not really all that old, but I watch a lot of TV and I know alot of old people.....lol I do have grandchildren and I love them all dearly----hope you got a laugh
This Poem was Critiqued By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2009-12-31 07:51:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
This gave me a nice chuckle to start my day.
I liked the rhyming also, my mother always said
real poems rhyme! The Stanza starting with "And now?"
seemed a tad awkward and not in rhythm with the rest of the poem
to me. I'm not really that old either but I can see it in the distance!
Thanks for a very nice entry
KenP
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2009-12-29 15:47:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ellen,
What fun this was!
WHAT i like is the fact growing older is just that.....It isn't who we were in youth or maturity but it maybe what is now.
The outside of us is the shell of us. And it wears usually quite well.
But always we grow and age but the spirit holds.
And we laugh at it all.
What a hoot!
Great fun.
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2009-12-25 00:43:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Time does change us physically, and I can relate to a lot of what you've written. It's humor entertained me, thank you for the laughs, I believe the twinkles will never leave us - no matter how many wrinkles we have.
Great light, amusing write.
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2009-12-21 20:50:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello Ellen,
I laughed and laughed at this poem. It is priceless and even if we aren't there yet, we will be. If we can laugh at oursleves all those creeking bones won't hurt so bad. Excellent!
cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2009-12-17 09:19:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
You have a remarkable way with euphemism, i.e., "my head once crowned a gorgeous neck/but that
has become a part of my chest" and your title itself. The subtle rhyme of "neck" with "chest" is
my favorite kind and the lines in the next verse, "Too much pressure on my knees/I wet my pants
when I sneeze" compares favorably with such great humorist poets as Don Marquis and Lord Dunsany.
We age wisely or not well at all...wisdom in aging being acceptance. The tone of your pleasurable
poem in its elegance.
Clever and well done.
JCH
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2009-12-14 11:39:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Ellen,
Yes, a good laugh to warm up the chill of winter. I liked how this rhymed and illustrated the contrasts of old age versus young. Nice to see you back !!
Duane.
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