This Poem was Submitted By: Moira Grace Hamel-Smith On Date: 2010-04-18 05:17:13 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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rant

i choose life as a lightening rod. some days more than others. today i feel the embrace of loving friends yesterday i felt at odds with  mothers (except my own) i feel sure (today) that my gift is NOT to enable the thinly veiled poorly hidden agendas that pass for parental concern raise the bar ladies refuse to use our considerable powers to shore up our made up minds our children are better than us we do NOT know best they are morally superior by virtue of our struggles the trick is to do your best knowing that they will build on it their values should be different imposing ours on them renders reproduction pointless the degree to which a person can accept deviations (even seemingly dangerous ones) is the degree to which they can evolve* *Tom Robbins

Copyright © April 2010 Moira Grace Hamel-Smith


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-04-29 12:11:50
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Moira, Raising the bar, is something everyone should pursue doing because if we repeat what we were taught, no one will evolve to a higher purpose in life. I enjoyed your poem because I single parented most of my entire life -which was completly diff than I was raised and I was rewarded by the struggles with the love I received back. Your prose poem are statements that will touch many readers. "Imposing ours on them renders reproduction pointless", is a good line - our children have to live life with the spirit born to them, and run with it - not have ageless ideas, constrictions and brainwashing change their way of thinking. If it's kept in perspective, and does not harm - it's a beautiful free spirited idea. Thank you for posting this poem which is very nicely done. blessings, Deni


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe P. OGrady On Date: 2010-04-18 10:31:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
A strong rebuke against over-mothering. Definitely food for thought. I don't see a specific structure in your prose, but i enjoy free verse. It's a novel thought to me that children are morally superior, it's not something I've seen articulated before. I would tend to agree. I'd like to think in the absence of any influences, children would choose right over wrong most of the time. The underlying message I take from your piece is don't saddle your children with your own baggage under the guise of steer them in the right direction. A very thought provoking poem which I'm sure will resonate with many people. Well done!
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