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Dusk Dusk is dawning, sunlight yawning, Stars begin to rise. Breezes swaying, shadows playing, O'er the evening skies. Moonlight glimmers, soft clouds shimmer, Drifting off in flight. Blue eyes flicker, hearts beat quicker, Passion fills the night. Love still lingers, silken fingers, Locked in sweet embrace. Magic welling, warm lips swelling, Softly touch your face. Spirits lighting, fire igniting, Pools of deep desire. Souls ascending, whispers lending, Voice to heaven's choir |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2010-06-05 23:01:25
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
Hello Joe,
Wonderful lyrical quality to the piece - well structured and thought out. That is why the rhyme did not feel forced and kind of rolls along with the progression of the piece.
I would still look at some unique imagery to make the expression of your feelings fresher in presentation.
Take care,
Duane.