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This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2010-11-09 20:49:39 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Escape

I want to go Where there are no woes No horrible dreams Filled with nightmarish screams A lush green oasis Provides homeostasis While vibrantly colored leaves Carpet the ground, swirling like seas Clear water trickles making sounds Soothing calm finally found Warm yellow sun peeks through trees Melting cold hearts with ease Here on the mountainside Wondrous place to hide And stand in the breeze - Take me there please!

This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-11-30 15:54:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Hi Mandie, I really like this poem. It is a wish I have had myself but you have so poetically written my thoughts down. Your imagery is vivid, especially in the second verse. Sounds like a place I would love to be...maybe you could meet me there! (smile) Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-11-28 19:39:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I wonder if Eden was like that. It reminded me of the warm days as a child when I would lay in the sun, and watch clouds pass above; finding shapes and animals. Sometimes "homeostasis" is more a matter of finding that day within, and knowing the world won't intrude for a while. If you find that place, and have the means; take me with you!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-11-10 17:50:51
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I enjoyed this little poem Mandie, and I must say that I want to go with you. If you find this place of which you speak let us know--I'm sure there are a few of us that could use the respite. While your meter did halt a bit in a few places it did not hinder this reader from enjoying the pictures you've painted with your well chosen words and gentle rhyme. Lora

This Poem was Critiqued By: kevin Dunn On Date: 2010-11-10 02:33:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi mandie I am not going to do a dry old critique. I just want to say by-golly! It is a good job you post here or there would be nothing at all. Critique.....I love rhyme, any rhyme, so I love it. Seriously rhyme for me can be kind of intoxicating or something. I really think all poetry should have it or not be allowed to be called poetry. I call anything else "common writing". Regards. Kevin.

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