This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2010-11-10 22:19:36 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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I Wonder Sometimes,
I wonder
How is it
That I
Through a life
Filled with torment
And torture
Survived
In a world full of millions
Just trying to get by
In a sea of bewildered
To rise up and fly
I wonder
As I wander
In the middle
Of the night
How a world full
Of millions
Hurting
Can thrive
In the darkness
We stumble
To reach for
The light
In a world full of millions
We’re trying to get by
In a sea of bewildered
To rise up and fly
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Copyright © November 2010 Mandie J Overocker
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-12-02 08:27:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nice poem Mandie that asks the ultimate question "How". Through life we never know what will happen and for some devastating and unusual things transpire that make us wonder, as in your poem what keeps us from falling and not getting back up. They say for every negative in life is a positive yet I truly believe our true character spirits endure because we are made to and have the sheer will to prevail under any circumstances.
Some things leave ever lasting scars but we can continue to heal if we have great faith and hope.
I wouldn't change any part of this poem because it is heartfelt and worded beautifully.
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-11-27 22:47:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
You have spoken words that are universal and yet personal to you. I wish to read your biography.
This piece is quite lyrical; it steeps and wanes, "I wonder, As I wander", whether reduex, or straight, it sets the "we stumble to reach for the light".
Often I think of my life, and my children's lives, and my shortcomings, and chance, and have often stood marveling that any of us have survived. Your instances may be more greivous, but the image is the same.
A well written poem.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-11-20 18:11:52
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Mandie,
I think rising despite the shroud, we fly.
It will be difficult, but I think it can be done.
It starts with one, then another.......
dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-11-17 00:58:23
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie,
Your poems are always quite sad and I wonder why you suffer so. Maybe it is just your style, a style that I find most appealing. Those of us who have lost so much have a tendancy to write our feelings down and I believe that is a good thing. I really like this poem, the words, the even flow and theme make it a pleasure to read, albeit sad. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
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