This Poem was Submitted By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2010-12-13 22:59:49 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Perfect Light A star beaming so bright
its shine a manger’s light
The glory of the heavens sighs
as he in swaddled bed lies
So precious a gift, this child
all angels on high did smile
From God’s hand we are blessed
His pure light, in our hearts
forever pressed
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Copyright © December 2010 Lora Silvey
Additional Notes:
Just a little something for the season
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2010-12-23 19:58:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Lora,
Nice, if only I believed it!
I wished it were all so simply sweet.
Happy holidays dear friend
Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2010-12-18 09:14:15
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I am enjoying this season. It seems particularly needed this year. You "little ditty" reminds of the purpose and blessing that is.
To not, the use of "forever" is particularly telling in you verse. Without it, the season ends, with it, it transcends.
A very pleasant piece.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-12-17 12:28:59
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
This is more than just a little something Lora. It has the spirit of the holiday wrapped up with a beautiful write on the reason we celebrate Christmas. Each line is poetic and pure. There is not one thing I would change for this and it would make a beautiful Christmas card.
Happy holidays,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Duane J Jackson On Date: 2010-12-14 17:33:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Hi Lora,
Thanks for posting something to bring some cheer and joy in line with the season. This offering magnifies the season but in a spiritual way (as it should be) bearing no mention of the commercialism that has overcome it.
I apologise for the brief critique offered on the last poem I critiqued of yours, being pressed for time.
I hope all is well.
Duane.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2010-12-14 15:36:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Lora,
This is a lovely poem. I don't think I have read a rhyming verse from your talented pen. I like the rhyme, the well chosen words and the beautiful message. You may have stepped out of the box to write a rhyme but you have done a fine job.
Merry Christmas,
cheyenne
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