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The Trace Unwoven, parted even stolen like summer days To vengeful winter brought in fall Narrow missing tide stumbling upon sand Where castles and hope trail away floating corpses Instead of coral life below But an interloper lies between stained teeth Posing upon Pergamos to avoid a Bible Like the truth dissuaded to spit upon grace Litmus test for them all pomp reduced to squalled A congress of corruption If there is a trace where a Republic once stood Its grace upon thee be outrage outright |
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2010-12-23 10:44:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.76923
Kudos for you much validated poem - interesting how you managed to get the full emotion out with such impact and imagery in every line.
Some outstanding parts of this poem:
Where castles and hope
trail away floating corpses
Instead of coral life below
Like the truth dissuaded
to spit upon grace
Litmus test for them all
pomp reduced to squalled
A congress of corruption
This is a wonderful poem for everyone to read - the disgust lies among us all and you have sharpened the teeth on the sharks that want to bite back.
blessings,
Deni