This Poem was Submitted By: David Keesey On Date: 2011-04-09 11:06:38 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!

Click Here To add this poem to your "Voting Possibilities" list!

Some Have

Some have mountains to climb, Some have holes to dig, Some have oceans to sail, All have further to go, All have dreams to die, All have dreams they won’t; So here I sit, Filling my mountain, Digging my ocean, Wishing for my dream to be read by you.

Copyright © April 2011 David Keesey

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-04-27 21:09:26
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Very nicely written David, it flows without hesitation and has a strong message that anyone can find appealing as well as uplifting. There is clarity throughout this piece, and the word choices are well fitted with the theme. I enjoyed reading this very much, blessings, Deni

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-04-25 15:16:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
David A wonderfully esoteric and introspective piece. Looking at each day; I often feel this entire poem daily. The contrast between the “some” and the “all” is almost the difference between those who are content, and those not, or more likely, those who are content with outward goals and those at ease with where they are. I don’t know, I know I fall into both the first two catagories. And you last offering, “wishing for my dream to be read by you”- a writers wish or a dreamers need? I think, what was mulled over most in my mind is “filling my mountain, digging my ocean”, as I examined whether I strive hard enough for that on the horizon, or sit and dream. And excellent piece.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2011-04-19 00:42:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hello, David! This is 'airy' and 'open' and 'feels good'. Your last line makes me want to cry! in a sweet kind of way. Its so hopeful. So patient. And its a dream on paper. I think you could drop all the punctuation. Each line could hang open-ended and I think it would make it read better. It would only change the candor a little, and that being up to the reader. Dreams are kind of like that, open-ended. I think this is great. A fun read. Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-04-13 11:53:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: Unknown
Hi David, I like the brevity of this poem and ejoyed reading it more than once. You have good word selection that expresses your feelings well. I do think this piece should be written without punctuation as the line breaks will work for you. Also your very last line reads awkward to me. You might say...wishing my dreams will be read by you or wishing you'll read my dreams...or something like that. Just a suggestion for you to use or lose. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
Poetry Contests Online at The Poetic Link

Click HERE to return to ThePoeticLink.com Database Page!