This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2011-06-12 17:07:47 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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RESISTANCE Refusing to
Engage in anything that might
Soothe those parts
Inside who are
Scared and
Terrified of
Anyone on the outside knowing that we're
Nobody special
Cuz all that we are is
Everyone's trash |
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Copyright © June 2011 Mandie J Overocker
Additional Notes:
This was one of the first alpha poems I did while in the hospital.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2011-07-04 08:52:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Nice acrostic Mandie with a sorrowful message that could apply to many. Everyone is born with self-esteem, unfortunately somewhere along the road "others" can/will damage the minds of beautiful people who have every
reason to know they are worth so much more.
Good poem,
blessings,
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-06-27 09:39:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mandie, a powerful look at a personal disturbance. As for style, it suits the subject, as to the turmoil buried in the piece- obviously volumes could be written.
What I take away from reading this is such a low esteem issue, where "we're nobody special" that it tears at the heart of the reader.
The inverse, that is, "everyone is someone special" is accented in a black to white manner; though unspoken and in this context, contested.
A dark energy in this well written piece.
This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2011-06-19 17:08:53
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie,
I didn't know you were in the hospital and hope you are better now. This is dark poem that goes beyond melancholy. I can't imagine what happened in life to think one is everyone's trash. It would have to be a defeating event that is difficult to recover from or forget. You have made expressive word choices and even though short it is a powerful poem. Well done.
Best wishes,
cheyenne
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