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To Rise From Ash Mortal ash that I have been went seeking solace through sweet dreams. But walking dead I left the bed where Incubus did scheme. As I laid between the sheets my mortal ash began to die, crumbling to dust in shades of rust, barely waking to the lie. Wake me up from walking dead! Save me from this nightmare’s end! Incinerate this mortal ash bringing me to life again. Rising phoenix begins to soar among the portals in the sky; carries me to other realms where mortal ash will never die. . |
Additional Notes:
Prompt: Disturbed "Inside the Fire"
Also influenced by Evanescence "Bring Me to Life/Wake Me Up" and Skillet's "Awake and Alive"
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-09-27 22:05:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.75000
Mandie, the personal touch to the endless metaphor- the party of rebirth from the resurrection to a kind word when the image within is dying.
Mortal ash – is a mixed metaphor; that of ash, which is subsequent to death and mortal that "will never die". In the dichotomy of the moment is found the redemption that you dream of in the verse.
Aside from "nightmares end" is the plea to "wake me up from waking dead" - that in living there is an exigency that exceeds being alive. It is not good enough to be alive, we must want to live; and in that the phoenix resounds as a talisman. Dreams are dreams, if living is not enhanced by dreams, the nightmares entail.
An interesting and passionate piece.