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What Do You See? Difference in hue Is sometimes all we think about Look inside Close your eyes to all that's "out" Empathize and you will have no doubt Of our similar point of view |
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Poem I wrote a while back about diversity - I welcome your comments!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-01-07 13:15:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.83333
Kimberly, as with all forms of free verse it is the images that validate the verse. Alhtough the two major rhymes bring a continuity to your piece, it is also the form that makes the image in this case.
I could wonder about the “similar point of view†and think that in a time of institutionalized thinking this might be true. However; when reading this piece what came to my mind aside from the colors, the “hue†is that even on the base moral application the “look inside†could hardly find a “similar point of viewâ€. We have peoples who cannot even agree that it is moral or immoral to destroy an unborn child- passionately disagreeing.
But that is not of your piece, and it is your piece that I am here to speak to. I could want to be party to such altruistic illusion, John Lennon’s “Imagine†never ceases to capture me, and I am a junky for the feel good movies at Christmas time on the family channels, and probably, should we all re-congregate in heaven, all the nuances will be validated or destroyed.
I assume you are younger and idealistic, to my older where such images are tempered by the lack of redemption in the societies of life. All in all, it would be nice if the two fold image were available to all, that is; what is really true on subjects share, and regarding the fellow walker with the integrity to actually acquiesce to what is true. I fear, till we join eternity, a “similar point of view†will be a rare gem.