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Had Enough? Enough when will it be enough when will you see enough to take the time enough to see me? We share enough to stop and learn enough to want to find enough true camaraderie When will we say Enough?! we've thrown away enough by taking time enough to hate and fear and flee I've had enough I want to learn enough to bridge the gap enough Embrace diversity |
Additional Notes:
This is a modification of a previously written poem about a completly different subject. I thought the cadence and word "enough" would be a fitting word for the subject matter of embracing diversity and tolerance. Thanks for the feedback.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2011-12-31 10:40:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.71429
Kimberly, it is an admirable attempt. The attitudes are brought out well in your repetitive “enoughâ€. Also, within the context of the verse you kept the subject (both of the verse, and of the reader) blind to the exact particulars of “enoughâ€. This allows whatever disillusioning attitude to be inserted into the context itself.
There is, of course, a weakness to the universality of doing such; it is that those offended/offending may insert their own bias into the verse- against those who they believe are the offenders and who should change. But that is the nature of the beast I guess.
Structurally I believe your verse works. Also, I commend the last line; it defines the entirety of the work itself.
Thank you for sharing.