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This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-02-19 01:10:35 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Candles Burn Out

We dance with ghosts. Live, laugh and fall in to a trance with those who were loved in our lives the most. They left while we were busy doing something else at a time when we could not help. Love never has time to leave or make us believe they are ever too far away to see as when they were alive so we’ll breathe sink deep exhale our sighs. We’ll dance with the ghosts raise a yearly glass for a toast shed tears fall asleep needing shadows to keep tender memories of moments that lit up our hearts hasten us to sleep while still mourning for the pain still runs deep.

Additional Notes:
All the spirits up above shine down, shine down your "Heavenly" love.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-03-07 14:04:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni, there is so much here to hold the soul to what such images, loss and regret predates. –we’ll breathe sink deep, exhale our sighs- immediately led me to a sudden loneliness and hope that were it to be that moment, somebody would intercept and embrace me. Ghost is an apropos nom de plume. Although one hates the concept of –haunting- when trying to vie for the next moment, those things precious can create an illusion that prevents, while all the while preparing the soul for an adaptive holiness. This is a very touching and enhanced piece. I wonder if it is a good thing that I can find myself, so easily, as its conscript.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-02-26 23:01:30
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Deni. I love this! We dance with ghosts. Live, laugh and fall in to a trance with those who were loved in our lives the most. >>>Clearly stated-I want to follow! the rhythm is good for a 'trance The ending is awesome too. I needed to understand the way this works and now I feel like I do.! It is afterall a celebration of sorts. But....I wonder about this: They left while we were busy >> OR <<doing something else at a time when we could not help. >>>it seems better to say, 'Those who left while we were busy" than to say "they left". I say this because it allows me to gather all my 'bones' together. and I don't have to sort things out..(hope that makes sense!) ~smiles~ I really like it, Ellen

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2012-02-25 07:21:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Deni, Yes, we dance with ghosts. From your note, I see you more benignly and optimistically resolve that. For what you've been through, that's a remarkable testament. MSS

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2012-02-22 03:51:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Dear Deni After pain, memory is the real curse :-( This is very tender... Best wishes, Mark

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