This Poem was Submitted By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2012-03-08 09:21:59 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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A Precarious Life A precarious Life
full of opportunities
fragile beyond knowledge
stiff, yet soft
in ways unimagined
dalliances galore
and strict regimens
a God is ready
even if I am not
no self-salvation
is a recipe for the soul
dreams disintegrated
by the reality of life
I face who I was
who I am
who I will never be
there is a joke
somewhere in there
that I am not privy to
but I get it
and I smile
Camus exposed the absurd
Newton, the exact constants
I watch the clouds
and enjoy the features of both
I was born a suckling
I will die still untranscended
in some maladjusted, defined
psychological state
but I don't care
I have always fought
the labels of the norm
and violently regurgitated
their self-pompous stances
and self-righteous needs
to justify and explain
their own pitiful existence
but I have digressed
from what I wanted to say
that basically
Life is so beautiful
so intricately simple
and on the surface, complex
there is no remorse
only jubilant celebration
only fireworks and inebriation
worthy of this funny
and precarious Life
that was given to us
by a loving, merciful,
and acutely humorous
God
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Copyright © March 2012 Medard Louis Lefevre Jr.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2012-04-06 23:54:07
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Medard,
I have no patience for those who treat poetry as a game, a hobby, a diversion, an intellectual exercise. You are not one of those. The forked fire of the Holy Ghost touches thee.
Keep burning.
MSS
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-03-14 20:37:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I wrote a piece for my daughter, “An Existential Discourse” that would be very well served with this piece following it. Not so much because of the follow the dots picture you paste, more for the many questions left unanswered, even if the big one is answered.
The theme of a Precarious Life is one that causes the existentialist many problems, if it is not addressed correctly, but also the theist if it is not addressed at all. I think you cover it all in your thesis.
The nutshell of :
I will die still untranscended
in some maladjusted, defined
psychological state
regards what is with what it should be, independent of the path followed. You final stanza address that path, after a fashion- and –loving, merciful, acutely humorous- very much sounds like a well adjusted humanist. Possibly, existentially speaking; we can all find similar resolutions within.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-03-12 20:28:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hello Medard! This is the first time I have read any of your works. I adore this style! So open to reading, its stance allows the reader to 'take sides' if you will. There is an irony that humor IS found there. I like those tidbits!
Life IS a celebration after all. Thanks for sharing this! It's awesome. I'm happy that I've read it.
~smiles~ Ellen
This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2012-03-08 13:24:05
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 3.00000
Well....the very best of yours I've read, Medard. Sparkles coming in from all directions and all hitting home. I do think you've found your niche. Indeed, coming to terms with the travel through life, quite an exquisite
summation. You are in proud company of many of the early twentieth century humorists when they turned to verse,
Lord Dunsany, Don Marquis, Ogden Nash, Charles Erskine Scott Wood...even had Samuel Clemons and Ambrose Bierce
(had they ever.) High praise and it makes me ambitious to support your poem in the contest...although you've already been doomed by the hit assassins that practice "I'll show you syndrome" anytime their anti-intellecutal
ackles are raised. But at least someone will give you acknowledgement. JCH
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