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Transitionaal thoughts: 2
I have reached the point in life where more is taken away than that which is given. My fault, I never asked for gifts and I never asked for them to be taken away. A face in the crowd an "innocent" bystander in a black and white reel a stupid, ignorant creature afforded a chance to live to create, to breathe some sort of essence into this life, my moment, my time or even beyond: your life, your moment, yout time. What a complete waste of breath what a complete waste of existence what a complete waste of matter and energy. Except perhaps to me. Ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny progeny recapitulates anthropogeny or at least some earnest and simple-minded attempt at it. All fail. All think they get closer all remain as lost as they ever were. In paraphrase, God jokes to an audience that is afraid to laugh and even worse one that doesn't even get the jokes. Is it cruel that we were given thought or is it more cruel that we know it? How can I reconcile with a God Who is everything yet gave me the freedom to question to look beyond the obvious to feel beyond the finite to sense the omnipotent to know all I need to know to release me from all the confusion and to make it simple, to hear God thinking would explode my mind. Is this generosity or punishment enlightenment or insanity I certainly don't have an answer. Again, I am at the point in my life, the same one, a different view. I am no closer to any meaningful answers though I did find some of the simple ones (probably the ones I was meant to find). If you need a reason to look further don't try to assimilate my ashes.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-05-03 13:56:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
OK Medard! Blow me away~ smile~ Your 'lost thoughts' are heavy and weighty. I say, "believe in the answer-not the question". Anyway, I like the ending. "dont try to assimilate my ashes" is awesome. I could speculate as to the meaning of each thought, and come up with different ideas. It makes it a great read, as I can 'manipulate it to fit', but is too vague for a 'good' crit. I wont offer any opinion as to wheather or not I agree. Its the poets rights to express anything and everything! A few typos. Thanks for sharing! I hope you keep working on enjoying the things that are Not given. ~smile~ I have reached the point in life where more is taken away than that which is given. ~smiles to you~ Ellen
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