This Poem was Submitted By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-05-14 13:52:22 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I Was In the Middle and You Were All Around

I expected it to feel like a sad lonely day Its hard to celebrate without you  but I thought I could bear it. My heart ached so that I could not I could not be alone nor could I visit with anyone except you. I wanted to sit in the park with you it was full of moms and kids and laughter I couldnt do it. I sat alone in my living room  this used to be your chair I can do it, I can feel you I remember how rich was your love I'm drawing it in, surrounding myself and I know you approve. I spent the afternoon with you until I wasnt sad I slept well last night and woke up alive I remember this feeling. Thank you for the life you gave for living and dieing with me for teaching me how to hold you When I need you now I'll find your soul still alive within me. I can do it, I can do it you would want me to survive your memory fills me with life.  

Copyright © May 2012 Ellen K Lewis

Additional Notes:
In memory of Mom, and the four others we buried. Of those still with me, I gather memories for tomorrow....lots and lots of them!


This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark D. Kilburn On Date: 2012-05-30 16:47:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
This was super powerful for me because of my recent loss. It is a beautiful tribute to someone very close to you. She'd love it and probably has read it, at least I like to think so. I don't see anything that needs improving, reaads wonderfully and fits fine as far as I see. Heartfelt is the word that comes to mind, nice job, mk


This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-05-28 01:10:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Hi Ellen, This is a lovely poem and it speaks to me as I have lost my mother too. You have a typo in 'wasnt' but that is an easy fix. You have made good word selections and the lines are full of emothion and love for your mother. Each line has been crafted with care. Well done. Best wishes, cheyenne
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2012-05-24 11:00:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
My dear Ellen, So sad, this.. Even if I have my loved ones with me, it makes me wonder how I will feel when they are gone.. "I sat alone in the living room.. this used to be your chair" these lines make my heart ache.. I am so sorry for your loss. Do keep writing. You can do it! :)
This Poem was Critiqued By: Dellena Rovito On Date: 2012-05-21 19:59:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Ellen, Your love endures... How great a gift you were given. And remember he's with you everywhere. Inside, in nature, in people. Just like my puppy howled like a wolf, [his ancestors were with him] I like the strength he gave and will always give you no matter what. Nice. Dellena
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2012-05-14 16:53:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
My heart goes out to you Ellen in sentiments of understanding it what it's like to have family leave before me and feel the isolation in life that comes with it. Very real stark emotions in this poem that lean toward the sadness but the appreciation as well that all your family would want you to survive on with their memories. Sometimes it's easier said than done but ultimately you've said it in your poem quite elegantly - "When I need you now I'll find your soul still alive within me" and there could be no truer words than these. Blessings to you, Deni
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