This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2012-06-02 21:30:32 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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On Prayer

The door is always there and it appears as I seek it—why don’t I seek it more? Because I must kneel? Because I’m ashamed? Because its hinges are oiled by my tears? The door is me, it’s opening is me, I am what lies before and beyond it. Oh heart of life that I must kneel before, why is my blindness all that I can see? The small, blind man I am is now revealed en route to a hidden destination. To thank or acquiesce in the journey I must seek the door, and remain kneeled.

Copyright © June 2012 Mark Andrew Hislop


This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-06-08 17:54:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Mark, You have penned a marvelous poem that touched me. I think your journey is a spritual one but then it could be a romantic walk. Either way it is exceptional. Because its hinges are oiled by my tears? This line is so expressive and borders on melancholy. why is my blindness all that I can see? How I wish I had thought of this line first and it will stay with me for a long time. If I am creative enough to get it into my long term memory I will never forget it! I like this new style you have adopted and please keep it up. Bravo!! Best wishes, cheyenne


This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-06-08 00:17:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hello Mark. I'm trying to find some way to relate to this, but struggling. Those first 2 lines could say it all ~~ hmmm...thinking about this door from this perspective changes everything. Lamenting at the door, ashamed...seeking...on your knees.. Blind to everything but yourself, and that an unhappy self! Its well written. It has sound structure and follows through with each thought. You said alot in three short verses and did it in such a way to leave (me) gaping ! ~smile~ Ellen
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