This Poem was Submitted By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2012-08-11 03:48:39 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Daily Bread

                                                                    he went to work                                                                      with a smile.                                                                     the smile left                                                                     a quarter past nine,                                                                     but he would be there til five.                                                                     he had a new testament                                                                     in his back pocket                                                                      that he would read                                                                     with his coffee and smokes,                                                                     and if the smile never came back,                                                                     he was ready.                                                                      for he had read                                                                     of the smile                                                                      that only leaves                                                                     with                                                                     Death.

Copyright © August 2012 Mark Steven Scheffer


This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-09-06 19:09:04
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mark. I like this. It says what you believe in without being 'preachy'... this is helpful to me as I dont feel the need to cross-reference scripture. (smile) Your work does have that effect on me. You're always making me think deeper into the Christian experience. I cant help but mention the 3rd verse. Isnt forgiveness a wonderful thing? A Holy Book in one hand, and a cigarette in the other? The irony really caught me! I think that the last word, being in caps, adds a nice touch to the finality of it all. I think there is only one death that would steal a smile, right? Keep up the good work! ~smiles~ Ellen


This Poem was Critiqued By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-08-11 17:39:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi Mark, You have used simple and easy to understand words in this fabulous poem. Though shorter than your usual fare it is most powerful. I must admit when I read the last word 'Death' I was stunned. The only word you capped makes it even more stunning. I have read this several times and each time I like it better. Bravo! Best wishes, cheyenne
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