This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2012-10-18 12:35:07 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Picturesque

it hangs there far away but close enough to touch a golden orb in October’s heaven I let the light enter and scrub my mind free of my broken fortress that makes old defeats look picturesque

Copyright © October 2012 cheyenne smyth


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-10-20 13:59:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
cheyenne, I looked at a similar scene, early each morning about he middle of October. The moon seemed particularly siren like this year. Maybe it is me, maybe it is not. The words written, - It hangs there- is about as enlightening as the image itself. Your ensuing relative location, moves from external to internal- and are feelings of reciprocity that is often felt. For me, I wondered why I haven’t conversed as much as in my more needy days- certainly the –free- that is ceded is as powerful! Then again, much like God, I hedge the grievance with amazement and wonder that I wasn’t missed and contacted as well. -broken fortress- makes the reader look again at the universality and constancy of the vision as viewed, later as once before. I don’t know, or I do; and old defeats- I have often yearned for the uninhibited passions associated with a wilder time. –Picturesque- now there is both the cogitation and the repertoire. There is a lot of soul in this piece.


This Poem was Critiqued By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-10-18 19:38:39
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ah, Cheyenne, its that secret moment when your muse sees through, that you capture time and time again, with your pen. I stand in awe. I sit with my eyes closed and try to imagine that great yellow orb scrubbing my mind free. I cant help but think "how awesome this picture" and I see your titles purpose. Its a great work! I wish there were more here this month to see it! It deserves attention. ~smile~ Ellen
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