This Poem was Submitted By: Ellen K Lewis On Date: 2012-10-18 22:58:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!
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Copyright © October 2012 Ellen K Lewis
I dont like pumpkin pie and I never have
but it does bring on the memory's!
My moms first pie made from a can
some sort of omen for families
because in those days, there were
some thing's that couldn't be canned
it took alot of tasting and stirring
at my house, before it was right
oh for the pie that caused such a flurry!
maybe this verse will fit in someplace this thanksgiving :)
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2012-11-04 15:37:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I'm not a big fan of pumpkin pies unless there is enough whipped cream. I don't care for sweets but your poem engenders sweet imagery and I enjoyed it. Always trying to smile,
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2012-10-21 21:15:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Ellen, so here I start this on a separate plane from you. I adore pumpkin pie, could eat it every meal- so what you write means more to me than you not having written it.
L3 – mom’s- and I know the can’s although I always reached for the canned pumpkin, and not the canned pumpkin pie mix. Listing the procedure as an –omen- is sort of the inverse of my experience, I’d rather see it as the preparation for the coming of the event.
-a lot of tasting and stirring- here you bring me in with you. It was my favorite time as a child, when mom was cooking and me, the skinny whelp usually offered this and that. I often have this doppelganger feeling when reading a piece like this that were I so sneeze and the mothers suddenly switched places, the kids would scarcely notice long as the goodies kept a’comin’.
I enjoyed your assonance (have/can, were/stirring/flurry) it added a homemakers touch to the enjoyment.
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