This Poem was Submitted By: cheyenne smyth On Date: 2013-04-02 17:45:37 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Stones of Life

On my morning stroll to escape snares of life I stopped at the edge of a rocky path A canopy of trees stood beyond the edge while the sun leaked light like a shot of thin arrows A distant roll of thunder and soft coos of a dove mocked the silent path I wondered if I could navigate the stones and get to the other  edge unscathed My footfalls were quiet but there were more rocks than I realized determined I walked on With my toes I pushed some of the larger rocks aside  smoothing my path Suddenly the rocks were no more and even though I was battered I was not beaten A streak of moonlight and clarity of stars caressed me Fear of the rocky path melted like magic as night slept in folds of hope

Copyright © April 2013 cheyenne smyth


This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-04-03 14:50:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Such an uplifting poem. S2 is so unque in its depiction of light beams (a sot of thin arrows)While the work is excellent on the whole the last two lines of the poem really hits, for me a poetic home run. 'as night slept in folds of hope" Wow. This poem is as easy to follow as looking at a painting. Thanks Cheyenne nice to see your back :) Joe


This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2013-04-03 08:06:01
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Chey, I tried numerous times yesterday to critique your delicious poem to no avail, so I return to once again to offer you a hardy "Bravo" for this exquisite offering that triggers grand images and captures the reader's imagination and emotions with your colorful descriptions. Somber in part, somewhat dark with hints of light dangling about it's edges--I was totally engrossed by your accomplished pen and thank you for posting this work for our enjoyment. No nits or spags, perfection all the way. Best as always, Lora
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