This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-06-24 14:10:56 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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After The Rain

After the rain heaven is reflected  in the puddles that surround our feet  God cried today  in an effort to get our attention Bringing heaven to our soles  for those souls who  no longer look up 

Copyright © June 2013 Joe Gustin


This Poem was Critiqued By: James C. Horak On Date: 2013-08-09 08:55:18
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe, you show an elegant simplicity in this poem. To further compliment that, I would suggest avoiding the sentence string. For instance, "After the rain"/heaven reflects/the puddles/where we step. I don't often suggest particular rewrite to anyone but your poem has that possibility and you strike me as having the potential to improve beyond vanity. So many don't. JCH


This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2013-06-28 17:12:49
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Nicely written and the content is of these times we're living in now. I imagine God does cry out to all of his children especially to those who no longer look to him for comfort.
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