This Poem was Submitted By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2013-10-18 15:04:01 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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What If
What if love has not
one heart
Or calls one soul
home
What if love were
like a child
that steps from
stone to stone
that lay within
a stream
Giggling while
she perches
smiling while
searches
for a stone
that does not protest
her feet |
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Copyright © October 2013 Joe Gustin
This Poem was Critiqued By: Kimberly D Rowe-Van Allen On Date: 2013-11-04 19:39:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Joe,
Love the imagery! Love the possibility. It immediately makes me think that love is ours just for a time, so we should enjoy it while it lasts. Thanks for sharing!
Kim
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2013-11-04 18:42:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Joe,
A wonderful lighthearted poem that I enjoyed reading. "What If?" indeed - if love could be like this.
Your verses flow nicely and imagery stands out -
very well done - I have to say that my favorite verse is:
What if love were
like a child
that steps from
stone to stone
that lay within
a stream
yet the whole piece in all is wonderful -
Deni
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