This Poem was Submitted By: James C. Horak On Date: 2015-08-08 08:42:16 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
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Don't You Know Dim light hidden corners
moon peering dropping shadows
Who blends these shapes a vigilance
when words are only pretend |
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Copyright © August 2015 James C. Horak
This Poem was Critiqued By: Medard Louis Lefevre Jr. On Date: 2015-08-15 00:35:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
Again, I love directly to the point writes. Economy of words that still are able to completely serve the message are true poetry. Something I wish I could do. Once more, thanks!
Medard
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-08-14 11:59:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
The writers blends these shapes. Words, their only tools. How else do we see the dim light or shadows dropped by the moon. A beautiful poem Thank you
This Poem was Critiqued By: Ashni Irey On Date: 2015-08-14 10:31:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
James,
I imagine my living room at night or a forest with lovely trees. Something eerie but so beautiful about the shadows and how they fall into each other. I love these short words from you that take me elsewhere albeit for only a moment. Wonderful.
This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-08-09 11:55:19
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Hi JC,
Very short piece by you - with intentions I'm not all clear on - yet I'll give my best to critique.
I have to admit that I'm stumped - perhaps you could shed more light - Could it be that in the shadows everyone sees something different? and what they see is only pretend?
Deni
This Poem was Critiqued By: kevin Dunn On Date: 2015-08-08 14:44:11
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
A short piece but Wow! a lovely read. I wish it had a bout 4 more verses.
My favorite line "Who blends these shapes a vigilance" Who we all ask?
Good as ever.Kevin.
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