This Poem was Submitted By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2015-10-17 11:21:19 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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A Novel Season

Picking up scattered stones to skip ‘cross shallow shadowed babbling creeks alone Hands slide inside zippered wear gone now the stifling Summer air  scales of color pattern the season reflection of God’s bounty amid changing hues when Autumn auras brew beauty no less than pure and charmed Fall brings soft offerings infusing hearts with warmth

Copyright © October 2015 DeniMari Z.


This Poem was Critiqued By: charles r pitts On Date: 2015-10-25 01:46:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
I like the slow, meandering pace of this one. It reminds me of a walk through the woods or drive through the country on a full-blown Autumn day. Cool enough for your favorite comfy sweater or jacket, but not so cold you can't get your hands wet. One of my favorite times of year--one where my reflections are more about God's bounty as you said" the beauty of now, obstacles overcome, contentment with life--"enjoying the twilight of life"--if you will. And the realization that winter (or the end of life) is coming. Different than the joys of spring where I tend to focus on what lies ahead, in Autumn it's about what has been accomplished. Wonderfully captured here!


This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2015-10-21 16:59:00
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Deni- A very delightful and insightful read (the unexpected rhyme is to match your verse, filled with surprise rhyme). Your first stanza sets the tone, shallow/shadow foretells the stones/alone. It takes no effort to feel the rhythm and airiness of the stanza, and therefore the entire piece. It is enjoyable to find the “to be” verbs missing in favor of the nouns and adjectives. The rhymes are delightful as they are surprising at times. To read the piece, without over use of adverbs, is also refreshing. (Maybe I should do that!). A fun and re-readable piece!
This Poem was Critiqued By: Joe Gustin On Date: 2015-10-19 11:02:12
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Wow. I want to read this to a love one in fount of a roaring fire place, while roasting marshmallows and sipping hot chocolate, and deciding what sweater would best been worn for the day. A perfect autumn poem
This Poem was Critiqued By: Wanda S. Thibodeaux On Date: 2015-10-18 00:54:29
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.80000
Lovely Autumn scene. It is gorgeous here in West Virginia. The mountains are covered in red, orange and gold. Although the wind is softly blowing, leaves are still hanging on and it is beautiful to see. Your poem inspires that vision for me. It is a "Novel Season" and not one that can be persuaded otherwise. It is meant to be God's painting, God's magnificent bounty displayed on His own canvas of creation. Beautifully done, DeniMari.
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