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Where Are You? Where are you in this world of too few surprises Of too much rain and not enough rainbows Where is the music of your voice asking the questions that no one has yet thought of or ever dared imagined I miss your courage in a world of cowards Your clever words in a crowd of mutes Life is way too long if your not in it Like witnessing a sky that has never known the sun |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Tony P Spicuglia On Date: 2016-06-30 08:45:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
h Joe, you begin this piece with so much dreary- I was ready to give it all up at “two few surprises” and “too much rain and not enough rainbows”!
Then came a glimmer of hope, for there is a voice that is musical, asking questions of things to be imagined.
The missive grows, and in stanza three, I too grow to miss this person, this ray of light in the darkness. Wow, “courage”, “clever” contrasted with muted crowd. that is a powerful image to me. There is a scene in a movie where an empowered little boy magically eliminated his sisters mouth, so she couldn’t speak or eat- that is how powerful your image is.
Then the crux, I feared, and I hoped in. A life too long, anyways, and longer, without the focus of this piece. Without the love. Without the uniqueness of the individual who inspires. I knew it was coming, but I feared it anyway.
No sun! Joe, a very, very powerful piece.