This Poem was Submitted By: fred koster On Date: 2000-07-20 05:44:45 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Unforgiven

 Secret shadows lurk within my past Darkened by what might be thought Their grip on me like that of "Thor" "Halt".."No need for fear anymore" Fist and hand would never be raised Serpent's tongue would flow like water Commands, demands, words of rage Day and night orders were made Like the dark set evil from within Fire red orders were shouted again Overlooked, accepted, mostly not mentioned Just follow the rules you won't be rejected Unthinkable orders were given with hate "Make a choice women, either her or me, No more will she be allowed to stay As long as I command the orders today" Of my womb, of my flesh and blood I no longer fear your serpent's tongue The only choice that I will make Be gone with yourself, never return! A stand must we take against this abuse Physical can be seen with vivid signs Mental abuse resides inside, unseen, Unmentioned Forgotten And Taken "HALT" No need for fear anymore

Copyright © July 2000 fred koster

Additional Notes:
Ok you asked for a rewrite and here it is, now be gentle folks, you know I'm tender.


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