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Dreaming is... finding what life can offer as you spend the remaining span of your life. taking every breath with hope and courage, determination and steadfast purpose. believing in yourself, developing your knack, exploring what's beyond the horizon. hewing the prickly weeds of tribulation while making every place a reign of love and peace. wishing the rain to give showers to the greenery-- not waiting the shooting stars to fall and make a wish of make-believe. yearning what life needs to grow and nurture, what the heart needs to beat and crave, what the mind needs to think and mop out. reaching the place where wisdom proliferates-- because wisdom builds up the mind to righteousness and paves the way to further advancement where new ideas flow and burgeon into fruitful accomplishments. restoring the broken relationships that have been neglected by time, bringing back the old times of sharing and get-togetherness to fill up the purse of delightful reminiscence. making a nest of patience where eggs are hatched into perseverance, persistence and hardwork. becoming a jack-tar in the ocean of adventures, with the hopeful aim of pacifying the humongous waves, diminishing the tide of fears and doubts. accepting abundance and allowing yourself to hit the jackpot. trying again--not following the footsteps of a quitter. uttering a prayer that life must go on-- that every challenge is easily handled by hands willing to thread the grace of His Divine Providence. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-29 17:55:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Clearly the most specifically spiritual of the works so far, and is quite plainly written- unlike most of your other work- yet still displays that buoying trait of undying idealism common to your work so far. At this point, it's simply a joy to read what small mountain is built with your words here. Even compared to your other work, this is clearly the most far-reaching in scope and mentions many of the key qualities of a master of himself. It's unclear how close the poet themselves feel to this, but there is a timelessness to the phrasing of these lines- one after the other- that builds into something rather signifigant.
I also like the structural indentation to emphasize the individual points made along the journey. It a little like life described in short sections. A sort of Strunk & White of Life.
Thanks,
REEG!