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Souls on the Edge One is unyielding The other will bend Two journeying towards certain end? Fool's gold hopes.. their luster now faded The soul quietly drowns In the current it waded A face in the shadow reflects no light- The tears are loosed in the dark of night The virtues that could heal and bond have slipped away.. too far beyond A faceless dream reaches out A glimpse of what love is all about Elusively now, it fades away- A desire quenched yet another day |
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This poem was originally posted on Poetry.com website but not actually published in print anywhere else.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Brandon Gene Petit On Date: 2003-09-10 21:40:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
One of my favorites, Terrye ; very elegant wording here. The rhyme has a powerful effect
and the owrd choices are superb. "Fool's gold hopes" is a great phrase, sand I especially
like the last two lines of the first stanza ; powerful meaning and the rhyme is completed
like a charm. "The tears are loosed in the dark of night" also stands out to me, and the
final stanza makes an excellent summary. I gather this is about the act of soul-searching
and the great lengths or risks that are often involved. Human souls are riddled with
desire and longing, sometimes greed ; sometimes sacrifices are made along the way. Great
poem!
- Brandon