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I was here back in the year 2000 and was gone for awhile, but I'm back now hoping to stay around and contribute as best I can. I'm 50 years old, married to a most wonderful woman named Donna and have a step daughter named Sarah who is now 12, we have a ferret( Daruis) , 1 birds (Benedict ),1 bunny (skittles), an igunia(Igmont T. Buttercup), Three Squrrel(Pecan , Sweet Pea, and Missy) , Five cats (lilly, catty, Sticks, Socks and emerald). Hopefully I can entertain a little with my poetry and learn by reading yours.

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Poem TitlePoet NameCritique Given by James Edward SchanneCritique Date
Canvas of LifeJana Buck HanksLots of imagery in action with flights of lovely fantasy I went back and read this with the first as one but I think it works well either way and do you really have Lamia fantancies? Thanks for letting me read and comment2004-09-10 10:37:28
CRUCIBLE OF THE TOWERSPaul R LindenmeyerAS its posted yearly I guess theres not really much to be suggested except its important to remmember Thanks for letting me read2004-09-10 09:00:23
A FragmentSandra J Kelley chained to his chair- a slave to his labor, doing what must be done because it is what he must do, knowing no matter how much is put into that first draft most of it never touches another soul, and thats just what I get from the first three lines, every fragment tells much more then what is eyed. Thanks for letting me read and comment on a fine piece of work.2004-09-10 08:57:46
Fairylandmarilyn terwillegeris this a comparison between the dream\fantasy and the reality which falls short of such lofty expectations, I esp. contrast the line: I stroll along a tranquil path in search of a mystic fairyland with my footsteps trudge on pseudo sand and my disenchanted heartbeats sag I enjoyed this very much Thanks for posting and allowing me to comment2004-09-08 21:51:04
1000 DEAD AMERICANSMark D. KilburnThe first part is very vivid, I can see the bodies lying in the sand kind of like a field of corpses, I guess I might have tried for a metaphor along those lines, the line- insanity at it’s worst -seems to me as one thats been done to death, perhaps trying to give it a new twist would help. But you do present your theme with lots of force which is always a plus, Thanks for allowing me my two cents. Thanks for submitting and letting me comment.2004-09-08 14:43:35
A Real Life Fairytale DanceChristopher T. Moore Re: A critique... I HAVE AN IDEA!! Marilyn (dialup-4.227.154.188.Dial1.Denver1.Level3.net) Sep,07.2004-18:00 This is a post from the forum , seems everyone is concerned about the site, just in case you aren't checking I'd thought I'd try another approach to bring it to your attention Count me in as a "blogger"...now how can we get this message out to everyone when just a few of us come to the forum? If Chris will answer Arnie's e-mail and agrees with the idea he can do it. Well...ya if he will answer. I don't want our bedloved TPL to die a horrible death...it has sustained me much more than you might think and I know others feel the same way. I use to go to Poem Kingdom once in a while but only met one person there that still e-mails me. He told me in his last e-mail that the site is in real trouble and one person has started her own poetry site because of it. Yes....I haved tried in vain to get him to post here as he is a prolific writer and the worst of it is he has never given me a reason why he doesn't give us a try. In the mean time lets keep criting and posting... let us not unplug the machine yet! Hanging on by my teeth...Marilyn 2004-09-07 18:32:37
A Diamond Of DesignNancy Ann HemsworthPeople as gems in all there many different qualities, we all belong to different groups and yet have individual uniqueness of our own. It makes me wonder what kind of gemstone I am, the irish in me says emerald and perhaps thats right your poem does make me a bit envious. But of course I'd rather think of myself as captured in: But then the transparent gem, it comes to light One that's radiance, does beam so bright No serious diffusion stops it's glow A soul that shines, a heart were love does flow I can only hope I am. Thanks for posting your delightlful poem.2004-09-07 17:36:10
Arthurian Ode - Part OneRobert WymaHere comes christianity and Merlin sees it coming along with Arthurs rise in power, it reads real well I thought. I'll be interested to see if some body else Thinks there's any flaws in it, Because I got to be honset I don't, The once great Merlin has left all behind to steward the vision gifted by powers while star wrapped signs mark well the decline of wizards tradition as Christianity flowers. This stanza boils down everything pretty well and then is used as a spring board to let the words bounce forth and they leap right into my eyes. Thanks for posting and letting me comment.2004-09-07 09:43:52
Flow?Ryan D Allenreading this I wonder if -down here- in the first line is really needed and if -to it- after flow is needed as well although perhaps your going for a certain effect thats escaping me. Thanks for letting me read poem2004-09-01 10:01:14
2 (Play)Jana Buck HanksI like this one better better than emerald, why? because the last line makes me think more of an interplay between the first and second lines, I hope that doesn't sound like I'm saying I like it more because I like it more. Thanks for letting me read it.2004-08-30 11:47:11
1 (Emerald)Jana Buck HanksNice contrast in the first line of the colors of sand and water, I can see them meeting and the sandpipers of the second running along the waves mixing with seagrass. nice change of 6-5-6 as opposed to the oft used 7-5-7 while still maintaning 17 syllables. A pretty picture, reminds me I didn't go to the beach enough this summer. Thanks for letting me read it.2004-08-30 11:20:04
A Loss of WhiteMedard Louis Lefevre Jr.Nihilism suched into a black hole, if thats what your going for then you hit the nail on the head, Thanks for letting me read your poem2004-08-30 08:15:31
Becoming Acquainted With BlyMell W. MorrisI'd hate to think you would't post this, It was very enjoyable with the : or where it pleases. I once fell in love with a pinecone placed at my feet by the wind which was following and obeying a force irresistible. A triangle formed: pinecone, wind, and me. You once were fond of a sprig of chervil, the nicest gift you ever received. with the stanza being my favorite, Its hard to step back from what we write and see what might be most treasured, I certainly enjoyed this . Thanks for posting it. 2004-08-29 18:58:42
Grandchildrenmarilyn terwillegerThat second stanza makes me think of my mother now a GRAND mother 20 something times over, They are her greatest joy and she finds all excuses possible to have all her children bring theirs' over to her house Thanks for posting and I did read that post on the forum and have posted three poems the last three days, perhaps another one tommorrow2004-08-29 17:52:15
A Society Gone WrongMs.Kim ShumakerMy soon to be eleven year old step daughter is preparing to enter 5th grade, I guessI'm luck in that I have the resourses to send her to private school, as so much of later life is affected by these younger years, I think its important to help our children not just to get all the information they need to decide but the vision to decide wisely. Thanks for letting me read a most interesting poem2004-08-29 11:44:15
The Great DivideRick BarnesOn the edge of decision sounding like its boiled down to a mathmatical problem, Does it add up or multiply your problems, Theres an infinty of answers out there thanks for letting me read your poem.2004-08-27 15:06:31
Blue LucyMell W. MorrisI didn't know the definition of Miniscibility and couldn't find it at dictionary.com, hopefully you can help me out with that.My favorite line was: Watershed moments when we try to learn From streaks of gnostic light where our Salvation lies. Striving for convergence Thanks for letting me read your poem 2004-08-27 14:58:59
Undaunted Soulmarilyn terwillegerI fell chilled in the first stanza as if the storms coming at me, while the second starts with what I think is the best line of the piece: Thunder resounds speaking in quarrelsome tongue Thanks for letting me read your poem2004-08-27 14:44:43
UnspokenJana Buck Hanksreading this poem inspired me to quickly make one up, I titled it transparent and submitted it. Actually its inspired by the lines: Somewhere, among the billions of clichés, someone said that children read between the lines and hear the unspoken. What they perceive is in fact, their reality. I like the reference to alice as a way examining aging. thanks for letting me read your poem. 2004-08-27 14:23:06
The Rock of HeavenGene DixonThe ripples some people make really shake us up, The last two lines make me picture the wildfowers and blackberries peaking out of the snow, Thanks for letting me read your poem.2004-08-27 13:23:15
RevelryJoanne M UppendahlI can just see a bird saying "Theres' a party in the maple dudes!" Thanks for letting me read your haiku.2004-08-27 13:19:07
A life in the day of a gutter-girlLynda G SmithVery tifgt in that I wouldn't know a word to take out or one to add, the succession of images this brings to mind were very interesting especially the contrast of the first two lines with the next two lines. Thanks for letting me read it. 2004-08-27 13:09:42
The Nightingale's SongRobert L TremblayAnd orphaned child whose spirit often dies When mindful of his solitary deal Thats a line I really like.Is:But mindful should you be to the bell rung is that suppose to be a play on having your bell rung, like being knocked out or something like that. Thanks for letting me read your poem.2004-08-27 12:14:17
OrphanDeniMari Z.After reading this ten times I still can't come up with one suggestion of improvement and yet I keep thinking theres something to suggest.Just one of those strange feelings I guess. I'm equal to the orphan who seeks everlasting family bonds, to quench the dryness in my throat with unconditional love, Is my favorite part, although that last line really is a good summing up2004-08-27 11:24:04
UNTITLEDJACK M HRINIAKWhen a poem is this personal its hard to suggest making any changes, But I wonder if the first: My father is dead. might work better as My father dead? Perhaps I'm just not reading it right . Thanks for letting me read your poem.2004-08-27 11:16:26
The Counsel Of The TreesNancy Ann HemsworthThis sounds reminiscent of Wordworth, One of my favorite poets, my favorite lines are: The shadows rose as moonlight passed and told of stories, drawn from the past in soft sweet whispers, voices danced they spoke in rustled rumbles low their hosts the evergreens. Thanks for letting me read it2004-08-27 10:57:13
Red SandWayne R. LeachThe first four lines are quite vivid and to me contrasts nicely with the last six in that they are very descriptive, I particularly liked: a newborn wound widens; Thanks for letting me read it. 2004-08-27 09:28:03
japanese verse 56 (Lilac)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoI keep churning purple blows over in my mind and have a tough time making sense of it , I get it if it should be blow, but maybe its just me2004-08-26 14:37:56
Americamarilyn terwillegerIsn't begemed spelled begemmed, My favorite Part in this is Capricious seasons blush His palette with ice blue sky, amber leaves, and rowdy flowers kissed by His chandelier, then drenched with shimmering moonbeams. but I also like the sapphire seas that cradle it part too. Thanks for letting me read it.2004-08-26 13:53:53
Here in the DarkPatricia Gibson-WilliamsHauting, especially the line: Shadowy demons haunt troubled halls once pulsing with cosmic vigor makes one feel the the late night fears and how gripping they can be, thanks for letting me read it2004-08-26 08:16:47
Customized LoveJana Buck HanksI must be really thick today, it took several reads for me to decide that webs here is a verb and not a noun here, at least thats what I think. The line: entwined clasp of smoothness marred by thick golden bands persistent skin compression is my fav set of words in this poem, thanks for letting me read it. 2004-08-25 11:11:53
A Rose for YouWayne R. Leacha rose, a love in thaughts they intertwine the stuff of stories, myths and sonnents too they bring each other close to whats divine the lips and petals each expressing true the legs, the stem, a path hands long to go anticipation enjoying the pause in moments before moments sonnents grow captured desire in the mind the cause whatever could be sweeter than the wait whatever could drive senses more senseless whatever could come closer to relate whatever could drive one more defenceless but words, words permeated with the heat of perfumed meanig to the heart complete 2004-08-24 20:57:59
INSOMNIAJana Buck Hanksoh boy! My wife has acid reflux so I can relate to this poem although hers stomach isn't asload as a bull frog, and hey is this a product placement in a poem, I hope your getting a cut; well just kidding, but I enjoyed the poem, thanks for letting me read it2004-08-24 16:11:41
Heart EyesJACK M HRINIAKIs the black king the sun unseen, thats how I read it but I keep wondering if thats how its meant, assuming that it does something I really like to see in poems , lets me read alot into what the blind man receives from the sun, Thanks for letting me read it2004-08-24 13:43:23
Wading with the museLynda G Smitha passionately writen poem, That for me at least flowed off the brain very well. My fav lines: send me skimming over waves to dip my staves in passions’ water Thanks for letting me read it. 2004-08-24 11:09:21
japanese verse 58 (Rooster)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoI like this one better than the photograph one , Im haven't yet visited that haiku site you spoke of in your reply to that one but if I want to really get a handle on these I guess I better so I can give a more helpful critique2004-08-24 08:23:11
ToleranceAndrea M. TaylorI agree with the first two lines and wonder if the third necessarly follows, but then I realize thats inserting logic into poetry and its more important in what way tolerance is blind faith. I'll chew 0n that for awhile and say the last line sums it up nicely. Thanks for letting me read2004-08-23 15:25:40
Maundy ThursdayG. Donald CribbsI really like the ending seven lines on this, and enjoyed the poem I've always considered a walk through the woods as something redeeming. 2004-08-23 11:39:14
Moonlightmarilyn terwillegerthe majesty of creation ,boiled down to a haiku that i keep rereading to see if i can suggest any improvements but to be honest i haven't got any, Thanks for letting me read i really enjoyed it2004-08-23 08:37:03
The HelpmeetG. Donald Cribbsi keep rereading this and wonder if i understand it , as it seems the I in the poem is a baby dear within the womb and then the lines: I came from. Now the earth aches for my hands to work its clay-flesh, to put on leaves, subdue it. seem to run counter to what I was thinking , maybe you can help me out with that 2004-08-22 19:37:50
ConceptionG. Donald Cribbsclustered and eager to put on flesh. That line really got me, sounds like it will be a stellar birth, not sure about any changes i would make, although i thought the third set was to ordinary until i hit the third line the good sweat part brought it back to the moment at hand very well, thanks for letting me read 2004-08-22 18:23:08
The Hand that Fills Your CupJoanne M Uppendahlare these birds of pray, I enjoyed this poem alot and doubt I could improve it in any way, perhaps saying what i liked best would be most helpful. Which would be all of the last: As you each fill your cup of joy, you spill grace notes so transient I cannot summarize them here. But surely the hand that fills your cup has filled my own once more. thanks for letting me read it2004-08-22 17:37:26
The EphodG. Donald CribbsI always wonder about a poem, if i get it - that is do i understand the writers intent, then again can I ever? and again is that really relevent? and so your poem brings these questions to mind because two lines where I now see more of the startled philosophers and along the path, away from epiphanies in fathomless dark I always find it easier to point out what I like than what possible changes might improve a piece thanks for letting me read2004-08-22 15:14:50
SearchEdwin John KrizekI see desire charging up a path looking for the single moment within all moments, your poem snatched these to lines from within my skulls' contents, I think its always a plus for a poem to inspire, thanks for letting me read it2004-08-22 14:02:31
Virgin Snowcheryl a kelleyThis seems to stand apart from most I've read here from the first line and reminds me that in critiqueing a poem the critique usually says more about the reader than whats read, I think this is ona poem theres much to read into it than at first is apparant and thats always a good thing, Thanks for letting me read it2004-08-22 13:44:56
japanese verse 57 (Photographs)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoCan I write haiku question vibrating escapes captured by your words2004-08-22 13:14:11
New Hope ShoppingDeniMari Z.maybe, its because I'm from pa. that I find this interesting, but I prefer to delude my self I,m more objective than that, seems very vivid to me, I don't think I have any improvements to give so I'll just say that the lines quietly amused by shoppers seeking, candles to dream with , struct me as the best, thanks for letting me read it2004-08-22 12:46:39
Speed MetalJeff GreenI don't know if some of this poem is just getting by me or what, but I found parts a little disjointed. However I liked it quite abit and the line About lidocaine flat feet really got me. Thanks for letting me read2004-08-21 17:19:23
Trip to the CityEdwin John KrizekI read this as a contrast between the complex (the City) and the simple life (the Home), and must agree that faith in the simple home life gives me great comfort, if thats whats meant i get it though perhaps i'm wrong. 2004-08-18 16:18:06
Lavender LuminanceMell W. MorrisAlways find it interesting to read poems on poems, I found the line about the Alphabet of discontent especially charming although I had misgivings about the last bit as it seemed out of place to me with the rest, although of corse maybe I just didn't get it.2004-08-18 16:04:16
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