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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by Paul R Lindenmeyer	Critique Date
Sigh	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, well you go from the Dark Side to the sensuous, and in minimalst style to boot! Well the line breaks are well placed with the 2/4/6/8-2 pace of the meter you force the reader to your conclusion as a piece of this length should. The verbiage is lush and subtle, again as it should be with the subject matter. Wish someone had written it for me! Always a pleasure to comment on your work.. Peace, Paul 1	2005-07-31 18:30:18
Cherry Blossom Melody	Jana Buck Hanks	Jana, a minimalist's delight. The translative passes on so much more than the verbiage, and your usage of soft s's, "softly shimmers", and "symphonic, splendor sparks in my soul" sets the stage for the humble thanks given in the final stanza. We are indeed the sum total of our teacher's offerings, some of which I fear we do not heed until the wisdom presents itself after the fact. Thanks for passing on the insight. I will have to pass it on. Another lesson learned.. Peace, Paul	2005-07-31 11:07:12
The Dark Side	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, dark indeed. Rhyme scheme and short line construction move the reader down the rabbit hole, tickling the hope side with "Visions of light" then crushing it with "for naughts", "without doors" and "without shores", finishing the vignette with "imprisoned" future.. The ending stikes me as interesting, in that while the daylight begins and the demon leaves, the verbiage of "Imprisoned" leaves a negative conotation imprint on daylight, as if it is not looked forward too, almost not of importance. My take of darkness verifying the desire for more darkness...Thanks for the post...Peace, Paul	2005-07-25 19:26:58
Epiphany	Latorial D. Faison	Latorial, you have enticed a minimalist with this brief work. The title is appealing, structure and pace perfect, and all in all a classic the masters would be proud of. Multiple levels can be discerned, both first and second person observational views can be attached and the message of the subjugation of prejudicial viewing of color is well presented. A multiplicity of wisdoms, viewed through the prism of "first time colored" is splendid. Looking thru "strands of black and whites" the facade masking the true reality of creation, and viewing all the spectacular colors of existence given us. Enjoyed the entire 17 word entree...Great job, Peace, Paul	2005-07-22 10:07:24
A Spiritual Decision	Latorial D. Faison	Latorial, any work giving witness of personal credo is wondrous. Your honest heart shines thru this sincere piece and is both welcome and soothing to this ear. Your constant usage of biblical references is apparent and well used. The wish to follow the correct path,find the "real treasure" coupled to the closing verbiage of the taking up of the cross as the price to be paid, rings of faith and resolve. Thanks for sharing such a personal spiritual work. It is always timely and of great value, this ability to be humble and thankful through our poetry. Thanks again, Peace, Paul	2005-07-12 15:46:49
Another Bronx Day	Jesus Manuel Lopez	Jesus, just back from a trip to Newark and Jersey City to visit my nephew. Lived on the South Side of Chicago till I was 23.. The city is quick to exact quick justice, right or wrong and you have painted it with large brush strokes here. The verbiage is direct, and the picture painted vividly. The deft usage of l's and soft W"s at the conclusion sets the stage for the sharp "bicycle." ending. It is reflective of the inner city I know, and a well done piece. Peace, Paul	2005-07-12 14:06:51
Where Do They Come From?	Kenneth R. Patton	Kenneth, delightful time framed vignette of that cyclical program of consciouness integration. The short lines force the issue of pace while the verbiage mandates examination on multiple planes as the piece moves on. Enjoyed the painted vignettes of "Passages" as Gail Sheehy explains so well. The return to the acknoledgement that another birth is possible, (In my humble opinion a discovery of a reality that was always present, just not percieved.}and that rebirth is a return to a better self. Poetry is such a powerful visual and core touching medium, used well here to express wonder and purpose. Like the Good Witch told Dorothy, "There's no place like home. There's no place like home." To which I humbly add my Amen. Wonderful verse, Peace, Paul PS. My brothers say the exact same thing to me. Your title is the first thing they say after they read my work. My pat answer is "Ya got me, they just come.".. I don't know if we're silly or nuts. Either way is ok, but someday I'd like to know which. Probably a subtle mixture too complex to explain to this mind. Oh well..Next.	2005-07-12 13:53:25
Unknowing	Dellena Rovito	Dellena, a dear friend of mine says that we are as different as the grains of sand on the beach, or the drops of rain from the heavens. The piece reverberates with with a plea to share those emotions we all have and all believe are unique. Perhaps, but we all hope for the best, wish we could share more, and wonder if anyone else is lonely or sad or in need of a trusted ear. The work is soulfull and filled with the desire to share and connect with others. Poetry is such a grand outlet for hopes and wishes and uncertainties. In the final outcome, we all wonder, ponder and wish we could make closer connections with all around us. In my humble opinion, we are all closer to one another than we suspect, and indeed connected at the core of our souls with Creation. Your final final verbiage might well be "everyone", but know that at least one reader feels connected. Nice personal work, Peace, Paul	2005-07-05 12:54:38
I'll Call Him Bob	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, a fine tribute to the unconquerable human spirit. The many souls you touch in this outreach you do is of great consequence to those you touch, and kept track of by the recording angels. A very touching piece of work mandating a standing "Bravo" from this reader. I'll call it heartwarming.. Peace Paul	2005-07-05 10:42:18
I'll Call Him Bob	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, a fine tribute to the unconquerable human spirit. The many souls you touch in this outreach you do is of great consequence to those you touch, and kept track of by the recording angels. A very touching piece of work mandating a standing "Bravo" from this reader. I'll call it heartwarming.. Peace Paul	2005-07-05 10:42:18
The Opposite Side Of Life	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, a wonderful vignette of creation life, death and rebirth cycles. I have been thru a forest devastated by fire in the Rocky Mtn. Ntl. Forest. It is the stuff of the Twilight Zone. You have painted an accurate picture with your "nature's grisly wrath" and "skinless and frondless in whited ash." The supplication for a final answer at the conclusion is also a nice touch. Having seen it and walked thru the devastaion, this piece was a pleasure to read. The scope of the destruction was always astounding..Thanks for the great post. Peace, Paul	2005-06-03 02:12:48
Soul Axis	Kenneth R. Patton	Kenneth, you touch an interesting chord, but perhaps answer your own question. The soul just may be "the center" and the core, ergo "yes" to your first questions. Don't know about who or what "so many" pertains to, but if it is other beings with "No Sun Nothing orbiting Just drifting" your observation is a personal one. The metaphor using the "Big Bang" is well done, and the ending "I've coalesced" deserves this minimalist's applause. Nice work as usual. Peace, Paul	2005-06-01 10:34:22
Hybrid Haiku	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, this haiku reminds me of a Renoir, splashed with the bright red of the poppies, and instant polaroid of nature, commented on and adjoined to Frost's short vignette of nature's verdigris only mandate. It is as it should be, instantly envisioned and absorbed. Once again, delightful work.. Peace, Paul	2005-05-26 20:17:36
Around the Block	Mell W. Morris	Mello, am going out the door. Will e you my crit. I love the work. Peace, Paul	2005-05-14 15:11:12
Your Pain In My Heart	Lennard J. McIntosh	Leonard, I read this piece when you first posted it, chewed on it again a week later, came back to it last week and now have still not come to a solidified conclusion on the subject matter, or intent. That is, I read it on multiple levels, with more meanings than you might have intended. I have often times written heartfelt verse with a percieved at the time message, only to read it afterwards and find that it's message might be deeper than "I" intended or even envisioned. This piece has the apparent wish to share pain in it's apparent message. I was present at the birth of both of my daughters, and the suffering and pain were, I believe, over shadowed by the joy at their births , but the suffering was only a commiserated sharing, not a personally endured one. That is the first level I perceive when I read this post. I may be presumptious, or perhaps too attuned to other subtilties always present, but the simile to Christ's suffering and your usage of "pain", "quell enmity", "buried in my bones" "grant me your pain" and conclusion "total immersion in me." ring of both heartfelt wish and humble supplication, in essence, gifts of grace unmerited but received with humility and understood thankfulness along with a wish to relieve the suffering by sharing in it. Your verse is always multi-layered, floral and well thought out. Perhaps you might clarify in response, but my perception of this piece, while clouded, is an accurate assesment of it's content as I see it. Thanks for the post, always a pleasure to comment on your work. Peace, Paul	2005-04-04 11:07:57
At The Real Life’s Return	Lennard J. McIntosh	Leonard, you speak of "the Way" with wonderful metaphors. This canvas is a plethora of well painted verbiage, wrapped around the spectacular work of Milton. You usage of question and answer dialogue, coupled with clear statement of purpose of Diety's plan, work well to move the reader thru this psuedo theologic landscape. The opening stanza I find most moving, in that "bolted ears" are in my humble opinion, both causal and willful in the damage to the spirit, that is wisdom is ignored and hubris embraced. Writers of Milton's ilk had such a grasp of the struggle of the spirit with the worldly issues. Their work should be examined by each generation, and commented on as you have done here, with heartfelt verbiage. It's what I read both on and in between the lines. "unwarranted love" is indeed the gift that "every eye is bound to see", and "life bathed in perfection" is indeed "that life that He first pruposed back there in the begining." This is my kind of writing. Concise and saturated with both the spirit and wisdom of the ages. A worthy reflection on a genius metaphysical poet's work which has illuminated both the spirit and literary life of all who take the time to delve into its content and message. Thank you for the uplifting post. Always a pleasure to read your work. Peace, Paul	2005-03-30 02:18:14
Judging By the Cover	Mell W. Morris	Mello, love the free verse style and flow of the haute couture selected by such an august group of writers. It imparts a view into their essence and attitudes towards outward appearances vs. the content of their creations. Love the alliteration thruought, but especially in the final two stanzas. Great story line and easy verbiage, and indeed, "how they sing!" Hope we all join in this chorus.. My best to you, Peace, Paul	2005-03-26 12:57:44
A Captive Bird	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, when quiet and "silence reigns", what wondrous music is heard. This is a personal write, and the solice requested shines throughout. The construction and verbiage are clear and straight forward, moving the reader along with unforced rhyme and touching that need for "relief" of situation with clarity. Always enjoy your posts. Thanks for this one, Peace, Paul	2005-03-23 11:26:36
Through The Pain	Nancy Ann Hemsworth	Nancy, isn't it great how we are granted access to clear memories of childhood, then allowed to meld them with the present and produce a clear vignette of overlapping feelings. Who has not pressed a nose to a window on a cold, rainy day. The outlook changes with age, but the "nose pressed, against the windowpane." repetition is a stark reminder of the child resident in all our souls. Thanks for taking me back to that "time spent in wonderment" of childhood. The pace of the work is appropos, and the verbiage crystal clear. Thanks for the post, and have a grand day.. Peace, Paul	2005-03-15 20:14:28
Your Mouth is Mine	hello haveaniceday	Barbara, a sensous usage of alliterations and pace. The verbiage is concise and the opening triple sss sets the foundation of the unforced rhyme scheme. Personification of the essence is well done, and the entire message is brought back to enjoy again with the closing lines. The pace keeps the reader's attention and as I said, the work is sensual as it should be. Thanks for the read, Peace, Paul	2005-03-15 20:05:05
The Rose	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, poignant reminder of the situations which abound in our world. Your verbiage is clear and the pace of the work is easy and flowing. The message is clear and in here and now time. You have an empathetic view of reality and it is both refreshing and sad. Refreshing that you feel the message must be posted, and sad that indeed the message needs to be posted. It is my humble opinion that if the "haves" contributed just one percent more of their time, energy, assets, and true caring, this creation would respond exponentionally and on a level not yet seen in human caring. On the poetic theme, just one suggestion, and it is only my humble opinion. As I read the piece, the theologic overtones became louder and louder, culminating in the final line. I read it as redeem,instead of redden, then re-read it. I anticipated it, and in the context, expected it to be redeem. It was only my thought at the moment, and I hope I do not offend with the sharing of the thought. Always enjoy your timely prose, my best to you, Peace, Paul	2005-02-22 12:19:51
Paper Planes	Jesus Manuel Lopez	Jesus, engaging vignette of creative childhood shared. The sharp verbiage mimmicking the message and speeding the picture on its folded wings. Very nicely done, bringing this reader back to "Paper Plane" days with vivid memories of Ed Sullivan and sonic rumblings of the times. Vers Libre, my favorite verse, and a today and now piece calling up echoes of days past. Well done, thanks for the post, Peace,Paul	2005-02-17 12:14:35
A Different Prayer	Lennard J. McIntosh	Lennard, wonderful piece witnessing the prayer of youth, and the realities of age. Our yearning for carefree times past seems to appear more and more as we witness children at play, a baseball game, a youngster first learning to ride a bike. Those vivid memories seem to present themselves as we delve deeper and deeper into our time, and mortality's apparent unrelenting gaze is more and more upon us. I've a dear friend who's often said that we only take two things with us from this earth, faith and memories. Well, I think the more happy memories we secure, the happier we are today and the happier we'll be tomorrow. Your bedside prayer is honest and touching, and the verbiage is crystal clear. True here and now poetry is my favorite, and this piece is as honest as it gets. You bring back my youth with your verse, and I can ask for no more. Thanks for the post. Peace, Paul	2005-02-16 18:08:52
Water Spirits	Latorial D. Faison	Latorial, well done, multi-leveled meaning piece with short, powerful verbiage. I have become a student of and believer in the "less is more" school of verse, and this is on that page. It gives the reader thoughts to ponder both in the lines, and between them. The short, quick verse drives the reader to stop and re-read, and re-think. The eradication of inhumanity, or the leaping over it as you say, is always the goal. That it is allowed to occur, has always been the puzzlement. The verbiage speaks volumes in few words of the struggles of many people thru the ages. Thanks for the post, Peace, Paul	2005-02-13 13:28:17
The Winter of 04	Lennard J. McIntosh	Leonard, this piece resonates with cold, chilling realities and wonderful alliterations. It is vivid and portrays well the fiece nature of winters might. Almost makes me want to book a vacation in the southern hemisphere asap. I dropped you an e-mail on the piece, and hope I did not infringe, but it is hard to critique in this space, since the layout is so important to such short lines and length of the post. Always a pleasure to read your work. Thanks for the post, Peace, Paul	2005-02-11 17:06:30
Reunion	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, Well, once more you weave your memories into the present "what if's" and make the cold room I'm in warm and full of the smells of "cocoa", "lavender", and "clean sheets" every wonderful Grandma entices her grandkids with. The story line is classic, and the short lines move the reader at a pace eager to find the conclusion. How else could it conclude, but in a heartfelt embrace of shared tears remembered. Touching and memorable to all who were fortunate enough to have such a woman in their lives. I had one, and my daughters have two of these Grand guardians to witness and hopefully emulate. Thanks for the enjoyable read, and sending me back to a kinder and gentler time. As always, my best to you. Peace, Paul	2005-02-11 16:34:53
The Problem With Angles	Mell W. Morris	Mello, wonderful piece about becoming invisible to all, while feeling all encompassing in the knowledge of a compassionate creation that indeed does care for and look kindly on each soul. I loved your usage of "canny duende at the door and a smiling angel perched on a lampshade.", wonderful vignette. The alliterations used throughout, "in fens or pocosins, near grasslands , high and low lands.", "wife on a widow's walk," all add to the magic of the piece. To learn the lesson of losing the sharp edges in life, is long and sometimes arduous for some. You seemed to have acquired and assimilated it's essence with this psuedo "born again of the spirit" witness to the creator. It's honesty is pointed, it's verbiage clear, and the picture is complete to this reader. Always a pleasure to comment on your verse. Thanks for the read, Peace, Paul	2005-02-10 23:58:27
After The Wind Speaks	Lennard J. McIntosh	Lennard, wonderful personification of the breath and respiration of nature across creations' landscape. Love the interaction and alliterations presented. "single southern terror that swaths its southern storms", "frost and fury", "gust and gale", from tempest and terror to" rest in silence", the piece reverberates, much like the subject itself, living, breathing, at rest or howling and twisting. I love observations of natures' power and submissiveness, always existing with reason and method when viewed from a poetic viewpoint. Well done overview, that flows easily and puts the reader on the wings of the wind. Thanks for the refreshing post. Peace, Paul	2005-02-01 22:43:15
Yearnings Like the Lake's	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, as usual, accute observational information turned into views from the heart. Seeing through creation both all their is, and why there "is". Enjoyed the pace, the verbiage and when I walk in my woods{in Spring} I hope to see half of what you report here. "Yearnings like the lake's for her translucent, fingerling streams." I'm calling it a spectacular line! Guess I'm looking forward to springtime. Great work, Peace, Paul	2005-01-25 18:32:49
Reader	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, to seduce the beholders heart, one of many goals of the Muse. From "pounding behind my eyes" to "corner you will bend.", the movement of the light of the spirit through the prism of the authors heart. I have a friend who writes in one of his poems "I wish my words to sear the heart". Always a hope as we pen our new verse. As usual, a pleasure to read and comment on your work. Peace, Paul	2005-01-23 03:20:57
On the Grief of Parents	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, the last stanza would melt an iceberg. You again share your solace with a wonderful paintbrush. I cannot imagine that pain, but you can almost feel the anguish of the loss of children from disasters as of late. What trials thoes folks are going through. Should make us thankful, as my daughters say, 24/7. Thanks foranother touching piece. Peace, Paul PS still working on final verbiage/replacement for aglow..	2005-01-12 00:34:03
Aleutian Getaway	Mell W. Morris	Mello, this is a riot,LOL,LOL a lot!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! From the title, to "I've got some thinking to do." this piece had me nuts. Whatever your eating, or drinking, or whatever, I want some...This is the best of the "hooters" I've seen on TPL, and it has forever changed my understanding of and appreciation for the Eskimo culture. This is a screamer..... Peace, Paul {still laughing..........................................................................................................	2005-01-12 00:17:42
A Bowl of Cherries	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, easy reading vignette of another time and another place full of innocence and fun. I truly believe it was a kinder world, and the years of innocence were indeed longer lived than this day and age. Throwing snowballs appears a far cry from drive by shootings and suicide bombers our children deal with these days. The key appears to be summed up in "never bored or afraid." Guess we'll have to pass on as much of that as we can, it was a delightful time to grow up. As Bob Hope would say, "Thanks for the memories." Peace, Paul	2005-01-11 10:06:05
A Web Within	Lennard J. McIntosh	Leonard, the personification of the workings of the Muse, with my favorite line, "moiled in painted dreams" is done vividly. I always enjoy your choice of verbiage, and this flows smoothly and entices the reader on, as the Muse leads with its' "creative voice emerging." To expose ones inner feelings to the world is the fear we all overcome with publishment of prose, and "can this writer hide himself from faltering apprehension, even while he feigns boldness?", says it perfectly. The driving force,the search for wisdom, always leads to reward, even if unappreciated at the time, and the "wanderings of a pen", and "gifted ink" are truly the forum and tools. I enjoyed the introspective and reflective essay into the creation of and reasons for our humble craft. The spirit moves at its' own pace, but its' motives are as you say "shrouded and obscure." indeed. A well written, enjoyable piece of work. Thanks for the post, my best to you, Peace Paul	2005-01-07 15:08:13
Right in the Rosetta Stones	James Edward Schanne	James, great story line, clean, crisp verbiage, an enjoyable pace, coupled with unforced rhyme. I enjoyed the entire piece, and could not agree more with "constant motion's hot flight". We wait mille seconds for what used to take decades or centuries to pass on. Then we store it for future generations like no one has before us. Wonder what they'll say about the times we live in?? Peace, Paul	2005-01-05 23:33:48
New Year's Eve	Kenneth R. Patton	Ken, a well versed ode to the alanon believers. The erratic structure, and the repetition of the "coda" of the participant in the first and last stanzas are also well done. The personification of "Death", and its ability to "seduce" and "suceed" are dark and honest. "Noche Oscura", or the Dark Night of the Soul is seldom written of, but always nearby in reality. Some pleasant siblances, sssss, but all in all quick and to the point verbiage, looking thru the eyes of the driven addict with free will and free verse recording the vignette as it unfolds upon itself. Introspective, honest, almost confessional, and a real life snapshot. I applaud the effort, thanks for the read. Peace, Paul	2005-01-04 13:29:50
X Me Happy	DeniMari Z.	DeniMari, the holiday season's upon us again, and poets send greetings of joy to good friends. It's right and it's proper to do every year, so I'll return the greetings of joy and good cheer. May your Christmas be merry and full of Gods' light, and may all of your memories be happy and bright. Peace, Paul	2004-12-19 23:01:12
HIM	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, I have often thought that giving witness in public is both pridefull and priceless. Pridefull in the best sense of the word, that you are proud to voice your beliefs, and priceless in the rewards "to come" for passing on your faith. To hang it "out there" so to speak, says volumes about who you are and what you find value in. I have read a great deal of of poet named Jessica Powers, and you will find much of her work on the web. She does great work on your subject matter, in fact one of her finest works is titled "The Garments of God". I find some reluctrance on my part to do any critiquing on the subject matter as presented, since I am a deep seated Christian, and find great peace in reading, or listening to others share their beliefs. The last stanza however, connecting the heart of forgiveness to the longing of the soul through a teardrop is worth its weight in poetic praise. As one of my best friends has always said, "We leave this earth with only two things, memories and faith." Thanks for the sharing. Peace, Paul	2004-12-19 20:09:02
Because I'm a Woman	Latorial D. Faison	Latorial, the playing field is still not level, and the rules dished out by society are still skewed, none the less there are signs of positive movement in both racial and gender equality. Hopefully, as long as there continues to be voices demanding true equity, we will one day be truly equal in all aspects of our lives on the planet. Frustration with injustice ring thru this piece, with an almost vehement pessimism directed at men. Some are extremely conscious of your concerns. Having two teenage daughters, I find myself constantly encouraging them to excell, compete, and never take no for an answer when they think gender is a consideration of how they were treated or judged. I know many men of the same ilk, and some overboard in their approach to these issues. I think we are all mocked, unjustly judged and put to fiery tests as we go through our lives, and have no disagreement with the "presence of injustice." I just thought you should know you have aware, compassionate brothers in your corner. Your structure here works well with the message, and keeps the reader attentive to the theme. The rhyme scheme might be adjusted a bit, but all in all it serves its purpose. Keep "movin and shaken".Some will take notice and start listening. You've got my vote. Peace, Paul	2004-12-12 23:49:06
Autumn Tambourines	DeniMari Z.	DeniMari, a fine snapshot of an Autumnal journey, connected to personal existence, incorporating some wonderful rhyme schemes. Love " Autumn breeze blows through the trees shaking leaves like a thousand tambourines" The short lines paint a quick picture for the reader, and the final "dip" is well done. Enjoyed the entire portrait. Happy Holidays, Peace, Paul	2004-12-03 09:17:52
The Texture of Blue	Mell W. Morris	Dear Mell, I love VanGogh, all shades of blue, and this wonderful tribute to a genius who is still a puzzlement to many. True genius has always been a mystery to the masses, but you have captured some of his essence with this piece. The opening stanza grabs the reader, and you imediately defend and protect your artist from the judgements of those blind to his spectacular talents. Your final stanza is a spendid tribute to Vincents' legacy. My best to you, Peace, Paul	2004-11-30 00:25:26
All Things Pass	Kenneth R. Patton	Kenneth, you write of one of the finest concerts of contemporary music to date. The "Concert for George" was an apparition at times, and a true artistic showpiece at others. Your verbiage and stacatto style adds to the intensity. It is my favorite musical production, and I have purchased several copies for my friends as presents. All marvel at the talent gathered, and the spectacular music they played through Harrisons' genius. Your ending indeed mirrors the scene, of "Everyone gathering to help As I plant a garden". A complete, delightful snapshot of a wonderous musical tribute. Great job, keep on writing!! He was indeed the "Searching one". Peace, Paul	2004-11-29 23:58:15
Lunar Longing	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, the personification of Luna is delightful, and the stepping stone to the universe is predictable, but I found the last semblence the key and glue of the piece. What has Luna always wished for? That wonderous sigh that only lovers truly understand? Indeed!! Always a treat to read your posts. Peace, Paul	2004-11-14 16:20:14
Congress This Morning	Mell W. Morris	Mel, "paragon of detachment?" I'm glad there's a question mark behind it. You're too young to be too "detached". The piece is current and so true for many of the pre- and current "boomers". Seems like we should be able to pass the torch, but we're reluctrant to do so. I'll bet it's been the Gordian Knot of every generation who has had to "let go" and hope for the best. The piece rings of melancholy and calmning rememberances. Sitting outside the fishbowl and using nature to relive better times past. It is Autumnal with an aurora of "medieval" magic. I enjoyed the piece greatly, but hope you will reconsider having someone else "take my place". Stick around, the fun is yet to come.. As always, Peace, Paul	2004-10-25 19:21:56
Deep In My Heart Is A Song	Mell W. Morris	Mell, finding touchstones and common ground are always such wonderous moments. Clarity of being connected to all others spirits is so calming and ethereal. Its what I see and feel from this piece. I love "a medulary moment". The assonance of the g's in stanza 1, p's in stanza 2, l's abound in 3 and 4, with b's and t's finishing off "at last." I enjoyed it entirely. Keep up the calming work. The world needs more people rooted in and "flooded with peace and grace". My best to you, Peace, Paul Lindenmeyer	2004-09-16 22:01:55
What is Rooted We Revisit in Sleep	G. Donald Cribbs	Donald, delightful piece about you and your wife's love affair surrounded by natures wonderous creations. The piece flows easily with soft verbiage, then explodes with screaming and wailing and threshing, only to return to sleeping, silence, guarding, hope.. I enjoyed the entire picture! Bravo on this fine vignette.... Piece, Paul	2004-04-16 22:44:47
"The Passion"	marilyn terwilleger	Marilyn, a moving piece that touches the heart. The verbiage flows well enough, but could use some tighting up. The message is clear, and mirrors your faith felt feelings. Thanks for posting this personal statement. I also believe giving witness when moved to is always rewarded. My best to you, Peace, Paul	2004-04-04 09:07:49
The Cross	Jordan Brendez Bandojo	Jordan, always a treat for the spirit when another gives witness. I enjoyed the format and the' story line. The final thought is direct and effective. What else can we do but "drink the cup." or walk away from it. A well done piece which lends to thought provocation of the highest order. Thanks for the post. Peace, Paul	2003-11-09 22:18:18
After the Storm	Joanne M Uppendahl	Joanne, wonderful vignette of autumn with subtle messages about continuation and preparation. The sparse verbiage, especially the third stanza, says much more than the words. Always a treat to read your work. Keep it coming. Peace, Paul	2003-10-14 11:40:41
Freeway	Rachel F. Spinoza	Rachel, your words paint the picture of humanity seeping out of concrete and asphalt, the sounds of the city, the graffiti, along with the old and young chanting give a wonderful snapshot of life amidst the metropolis. The assonance and story are a great meld. Very enjoyable to an ex city dweller. Thanks for posting.	2003-09-07 20:00:29
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