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Poem TitlePoet NameCritique Given by Galen never received one at bir ArrowheadCritique Date
japanese verse 26 (Camel)Erzahl Leo M. EspinoErzahl, Even though I'm new to this stuff (first day on site and just starting in on writing poetry), I do know what this is: haiku 5-7-5. Perfect form. This poem says many things to me. First, the land is barren which suggests to me destruction of it or futility or it simply doesn't bear fruit. You might be extending this further to mean modern life, but I'm not sure of that one. So much meaning in just 5 syllables. The second line adds meaning to the first one by bringing a person into the picture, but image is precise. This is a gentle traveler who continues to trek in spite of the barrenness. (Of course, the gentle traveler could only refer to the title word - camel, but I'd like to think it could be either.) I like the alliteration with trek and traveler, then the word gentle also has a t, which I think is a beautiful word choice. The third line seems to reinforce the image of barren land, because the traveler is "carrying the hills." A heavy load, almost too heavy and it is a wonder the gentle traveler can keep going. Actually, this poem could be referring to the way people have always, or so it seems, used animals for our own benefit often without any consideration for the animal. Also, perhaps the way we are ruining the land in a way that hurts the wildlife. I may have found too much in it, but your poem suggests so much to me and has gotten me to think about a few things. Thank you for sharing and it certainly belongs near the top. Good going. 2003-10-05 20:25:57
Right to LifeRachel F. SpinozaHi Rachel, Read both yours and hers. I like the way your poem sticks to imagery of the various situations that lead to the necessity of this procedure, and you have not given way to the ranting and railing in Jennifer's poems, though I don't quite understand the last stanza. Who is covered with bruises? Might refer back to the rape and the horror of carrying a child that resulted from such. Not the sort of thing that can lead to a good life, especially when scientists now suspect the hereditary basis of violence. The child could well be like its father and then even more heartbreak for the girl later in life. Good write and good read.2003-09-11 12:20:11
MY VIEWS AND PHILOSPHYcedric napti waltersAn interesting poem, especially noted some of the contradictions and I think they lend an air of humanness to the narrator. The philosophy here is hard, at least for me, to capture into a sentence or two. I'm left with more of a sense of narrator, rather than anything I can put into logical intelligence. I especially like the transition to nature and God's wonders at the end, because the beginning starts so sad, at least for me. Hope to see others of yours. Good Luck.2003-09-06 14:47:33
THE DEVIL'S DUEMark D. KilburnHi Mark, For the most part, you seem to understand depression. In terms of theme, I think you're a little too harsh on depressed people. Granted they have some of the qualities you mention, yet you do imply they have control over these feeling. As I understand it some do, but too many don't because it can be caused from physical things, like diabetis, the flu, or cancer. Unfortunately, too many of them don't seek a doctor's advice and end up as you've stated in a sea of blood. Your poem is good because it brings up issues that relate to life and people. At times, in the poem it seems you have sympathy, but others times, not. With any negative human trait, judgement doesn't help them to overcome it. But gentleness and understanding that we all carry Original sin. It just shows itself in different ways to different people. Anyway, poem does generate discussion, and I see a firm decision on what depressed people are like. Thanks for sharing. Good Luck and keep 'em coming. Galen2003-08-30 08:03:39
Dying, A Biblical AllegoryC ArrownutFantastic Poem. Gives the afterlife a place and makes the dying process concrete. Yep! I agree. Sounds like the allegories in the Bible. Great going and keep 'em comin'.2003-08-26 13:41:02
Soul MateMell W. MorrisHi Mell, I can certainly understand your feelings and attiude toward poetry. I too enjoy it. I like the way you slowly build poetry up, first reading mudane words, so to speak, then finally the uplifting into another realm of existence. It's a slow build-up which I find effective. I enjoyed reading your poem very much. Thanks for sharing. 2003-08-23 17:57:25
Home Townmarilyn terwillegerAn excellent anti-war poem. Presents the bloody guts of war, the destruction and loss, rather than the glory of old. Not mentioning which war gives it a timelessness and timeliness, and prsents the idea that war has always been a nightmare and the death of the soldier so lonely and futile. It shows how basically death is lonely in the sense that when all is said and done, no matter who's there, each man dies alone. Death is something no one else can face for you or tell you how to do it. There are manuals on grieving, but little on death itself, mainly because no one has returned to write a manual for us. (Not counting Christ, of course.) Am I anyway on track? Is the above what you intended? Thanks for sharing.2003-08-19 15:16:15
Waiting in the CradleRachel F. SpinozaHi Rachel, I enjoyed your poem. What I gather from it is that Amanda is a baby. Perhaps because babies so frequently have dimples in their knees. I also gather that each individual (symbolized by Amanda) throws a pebble in the pond of the universe and its ripple along those of many others changes the course of life and destiny of the human race. I caught the rhyme in "suppose" and "nose." I don't recall much was ever said about her nose, but in a sense if her nose symbolizes her inherent ability to understand and manipulate men, it makes sense. Of course, I could be way off track. So how'd I do? Anywhere near the mark of your intent?2003-08-19 15:07:18
Let Us Protect YouC ArrownutC. good going. Finally, a decent poem about the ridiculous state our governemnt is in. You really caught the flavor of this Bush era. Love the message, but I like rhyme best. Good luck.2003-08-16 13:10:33
MAN'S BEST FRIENDMark D. KilburnHi Mark, read about the doggie. He's a lot like mine in the morning, though he tires quickly--getting old, I fear. But I've enjoyed him so much I'm sure to get another. Thanks for sharing. 2003-08-15 21:02:51
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