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Poem Title	Poet Name	Critique Given by Pat Eaklor	Critique Date
Blessings of A Good Night's Rest	DeniMari Z.	Hi, DeniMari, I think this poem is wonderful! I'm glad I wasn't around to read the original; but however it was, I believe your revision has exactly hit the spot! I could feel the comfort of carefree sleep with a looking forward to a beautiful day. My favorite lines are: The tide has turned over again mornings cut out brand new gems. Of dawn to touch feelings of lightened pigments from darkened dust. Bravo!!! TicaBelle	2011-05-30 12:16:03
Momentary Elegance	James C. Horak	Hi, James, I'm new here at TPL, so I don't understand your Author's Note. Maybe that's just as well, for it made me feel sad, however. Now, to Momentary Elegance: This poem has a very nice emotional buildup which is capped and then released by your last line, "To drift one moment into eternity" Effective. Brings back wonderful memories... Pat	2011-05-22 13:26:23
My Prayer( rewrite)	James Edward Schanne	Better rhyme this time.... Still stirs me inside. The rhyme of legacy and embassy is forced (as someone else pointed out)... That aside, continues to repeat in my mind. I like your prayer. TicaBelle	2011-05-21 09:41:34
Her Name	cheyenne smyth	Hi, Cheyenne, A lovely word picture that gave me sensations of changing seasons. Your third stanza is, I think, very nice. I particularly liked envisioning the warm summer flowing from the grass to water pools. One thing did strike me as possibly needing a little attention: In your first stanza Her eyes seek ancient rays of golden sun that cascades slowly among dancing falls "ancient rays" are what "her eyes seek", not golden sun. The phrase, of golden sun, modifies rays. So I think the verb should be cascade, as rays cascade. I don't mean to be picky; and know it's just my opinion... I really like the picture you create here! Pat	2011-05-19 17:00:01
American Lie	James C. Horak	Hi, James, Goodness, this is deeper than I thought on my first reading... And you're right. "They" DO tell us not to do whatever it is we've always done. I like this poem, James. It kinda reminds me of the 60's! Pat	2011-05-18 22:52:21
A Chruch Stands	cheyenne smyth	Hi, Cheyenne, I love old, holy places, as I'm sure you know. I liked your choice of words, particularly "inside its beaten walls whose steeple leans into time’s sigh and tomorrow belongs to yesterday" Wow, very nice! One thing, though. I would have liked to see you end your poem with: "...whose binding strength depends on faith" because the last four lines seem redundant to me. Just my opinion! Keep up the good work! Pat	2011-05-18 22:45:31
My Prayer	James Edward Schanne	Hi, James, Your poem caused something to sir within me. I enjoyed your rhyme; and the first quatrain, especially, has stayed with me. As a matter of fact, I find myself repeating it as I am writing this. You speak of something being sought by many, many people... Keep it up! Pat	2011-05-18 22:14:06
Meandering Waters	cheyenne smyth	Hi, Cheyenne! This poem is so full of emotion that it took me a minute or so to absorb it... I think the last quatrain is most emotionally charged and significant. One question: in, The eyes of dawn that flutters over dreams, I'm a little confused (which is a natural state for me). Do you mean the eyes flutter over dreams, or dawn that flutters over dreams. The plural, flutters, would indicate that dawn does the fluttering. Is that your intention? You've done it again!	2011-05-16 20:48:32
Toast It!	Ellen K Lewis	This was a fascinating poem to me. I read, reread, then reread again to be sure of all the conflicting emotions it engendered in me... The first three lines are very powerful! I cannot think of any terrible dictator who did not start out to seem to be a benevolent savior. You play these first lines very well and emphasize them with the short 2-lined flat statement which follows. Then other points hammer home: the hidden real intention, the betrayal of innocence; the stalking of intended victims... Powerful, powerful poem. I liked it! TicaBelle	2011-05-15 23:59:30
Some Times	David Keesey	Hi, David, This poem held my attention very well. Also, I did feel a sense of panic which built to a climax for me in the last line. I think this is a good poem and an especially good last line for this poem. One other observation: by abandoning the rhyme after the first 4 lines, I thought you added an additional sense of desperation to the poem. TicaBelle	2011-05-15 23:40:33
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