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Displaying Critiques 1 to 13 out of 13 Total Critiques.| Poem Title | Poet Name | Critique Given by Joan M Whiteman | Critique Date |
| Gone | marilyn terwilleger | Marilyn - Your poem has a univcersal quality that allows various interpretations. Could be read as a eulogy to a loved one who passed away (in that sense, a lovely tribute and beautiful "goodbye") or - it might just be about a "parting of the ways" for two lovers - the "death" of a love affair, as it were (again...a lovely tribute, beautiful "goodbye" with an added: "I will survive"). Whatever the interpretation, this is nicely done! Joan | 2007-06-23 18:35:22 |
| Forsaken | Jana Buck Hanks | Jana - A diouble rejection by two important people in your life? How painful that must be! Surely, whatever you've done - this should settle any Karmic debt! Your poem is terse and to-the-point. Harsh but strong in the way you relate the story. Poetry pared to the bare bone...good work! Joan | 2007-06-10 19:35:54 |
| Teton haiku revised | marilyn terwilleger | Terse...descriptive...as Haiku should be! Great images created here. There is a feel of the mountains in these poems. Thanks for posting! Joan | 2007-06-05 09:28:55 |
| Anna | DeniMari Z. | Most difficult endeavor, these eulogaic poems but you handle it quite well. You show very clearly your aching loss, the pain and all of the love in your heart. A touching write. Thank you for sharing Joan | 2007-06-05 09:20:55 |
| July in Salyersville | Jana Buck Hanks | Granny's attic is most surely the treasure house of America. You paint a lovely Norman Rockwell type image here. One can see the child, the attic and the toys quite clearly in your words. Nice poem! Joan | 2007-06-05 09:17:48 |
| ALONE | Monica ONeill | Moni - Nicely done for so sad a commentary. Arnie was one of my favorites here. No pretentions...he knew just exactly who he was and spoke his mind (and the truth) in such a pleasing manner. Nice "from the heart" poem. Joan | 2007-06-05 09:14:21 |
| Budding Over | Dellena Rovito | Dellena - Another nice nature poem from your pen. Quite "Dickensian" (as in Emily). Sharp imagery ...nicely handled! Brava! Encore! Joan | 2007-06-05 09:04:55 |
| Spun Lace and Soap Suds | marilyn terwilleger | Marilyn - Interesting what thoughts are brought forth when standing seaside, watching the waves lap the shore. You capture that moment well with imagery that perfectly brings the proper picture to mind's eye. Your finale is spot on...The thought of youthful days spent on summer beaches is invariably where such reflections go. Very nice piece of poetry! Joan | 2007-05-18 11:12:14 |
| Porcupine | Mark Andrew Hislop | Mark - Intriguing bit of word-play. Sounds like a battle of the pen is impending. I like the mystery you impart here. Your poem is open to many interpretations. Each read tells a different story. VEry enjoyable! Joan | 2007-05-18 11:03:28 |
| The truth of the passion | Mark Andrew Hislop | Mark, Great job! I'll be interested to see how the "purists" react to this "different" take on the story. Your technique (lulling the reader into a sense of slow rhyme, then a smack to the forehead with the last lines) is interesting and effective in emphasizing the bottom line of your story - (Was the crucifixion an act of salvation or simply an escape from the insanity of the human race?) Very enjoyable read! Joan W. | 2007-01-17 13:19:44 |
| WASP | James C. Horak | James - After reading the commentary posted on the forum regarding this poem, I had to read and offer comment. First, it is obviously a very well-done presentation of the point you are offering, judging from the response of the previous critiquers. Few (if any) critiqued the poem as a poem, i.e. offering opinions or criticism on construction, poetics, style or the like. All responded -viscerally, in some cases- to the message. Interestingly, the opinions were almost diametrically opposed. The poem was viewed (by most) as a strong portrayal of truth ("Speaks the Truth..." - Mary; "Truth spoken here..." - Claire) and by others as "Crap" (Rachel). One critiquer (Mark M.) was so provoked by the piece that he was caused to hurl epithets with no comment about the poem, its structure or its poetic value. The reason that I am citing these other critiques is that they validate my (unlearned) opinion that your poem - as a poem - is wonderfully successful. It, very obviously, has a great impact on its readers regardless of their opinion of its message. It seems that none can read it without being propelled into thought regarding its message and that, to me, is what poetry is all about. While I am not in total agreement with the idea of reverse racism or manifest destiny, the message of your poem reached inside and stirred my thoughts. To me, that makes a successful poem. Structure-wise, your punctuation (for me) was sometimes confusing. (I may just be reading it incorrectly) For example - 1st stanza, 2nd line - Should there be a comma after "...children"? Without the comma, the stanza reads (to me) that the "White brother" is not concerned with "protecting your own children (from) repeating the stigma of being white." With a comma, the stanza becomes a listing of the "White brother's" weaknesses: "...self-scorned..." "...unthinking of protecting your own children..."; ",,,repeating the stigma of being white..." Oh, just one more thing (forgive me...grammar is not my strong suit) - 3rd stanza: "Protestant" - are you using that as an adjective or should I read a noun there? (Sorry...I hope I'm not nit-picking!) I enjoyed the poem and..I enjoyed the responses! Thank you! Joan W | 2007-01-17 12:49:09 |
| Mirrors Have Memories | Annette L Cowling | Annette - Well done! Here you exhibit the tersness and tightness I spoke about in my critique of "Soul Unattended." You say all that needs to be said, again, you create fine imagery and there is no superfluous language cluttering up thisd fine poem. Excellent work! Thank you. JW | 2003-11-11 13:58:18 |
| Soul Unattended | Annette L Cowling | Annette - This could be called an exercise in egocentricity. ("...it is everything else that is revolving around me...") Many interesting and unique images ("...porcelain plates on picnic tables - nice alliteration, clever line) Too wordy, though! There are many places where this could be tightened up and carved into an excellent piece. For example - the first two lines: "I am neither being pushed back nor pulled forward. It is everything else that is revolving around me." could be: "I am neither being pushed nor pulled Everything else is revolving around me" Since your second line speaks of how things "revolve around" you, the direction in which you are being "pushed and pulled" is really irrelevant so you can do without the "forward" and "back" without affecting the clarity of the poem. Good poetry is terse and tight. There is a good poem here...just need a bit of a trim. JW | 2003-11-11 13:52:32 |
| Poem Title | Poet Name | Critique Given by Joan M Whiteman | Critique Date |
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