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What you gave up and Desire (two poems) What you Gave Up I see. With other eyes. I see. Sacrifice. What have you gained, For what you gave up? Did you get what you craved, And satisfy inner needs? Or are you suffering, Withdrawn. Alone. Incomplete? Things will always change, But will they get better? if they stay unchanged, Will they get worse? Is that why we want, Desire, need? Is that why we hunger, Crave, bleed? We shed some life, For a part of that need, Only to end up deeper, Farther in-deep. I see what you gave up, I see what you receive, I know its not, Half of what you believe. No Desire Be happy inside, Find contentment within, Happiness. lasts. Desire. does not. It burns what you feed it, Destroys what you gain, It grows ever hungry, For possessions you cannot attain. Give in to satisfaction And be happy forever, Do not desire, And you shall not endeavor. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2003-12-06 17:47:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.54412
nice thoughts in the second poem my friend......what we desire may not always be what God has in store and that is sometimes a hard lesson to be learnt......
at first the opening poem reminded me of me.....yet, I stop to ask myself what have I gained from giving up a portion of my life to care for my mom and mother in law? Well, it is a heart warming gift of love.....and yes, there are days when one wants to run, hide, scream for at 92 my own mom can be hard to handle but then there are days when she smiles with those blue eyes of hers and I see the reflection of love there within her heart....very seldom when I was growing up did my mom ever tell me how much or if she even loved me....my dad did , all the time......and he died at age 54......miss him even today but I can still see his warm smile........my mom used to say "Me too" when you told her that you loved her.....it was a joke, she played it......things do change for the better for when I started to care for mom she was at death's door.......she responded to my care, it made a difference.....liked the way you structured your two poems though....hand in hand they do go together......I wonder how many others you have touched more then you know......thanks for posting and sharing with us....be safe, God Bless, Claire