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The Apostrophe: Enos at the Bacchanalia in Cozumel O Freedom – That unfettered-ness: By what measurement do we hold thee most dear? Those tender inches of wealthy endowment, a pair of capital letters, the broad shading – When the moist clamshell’s disclosed, tight and wet inside, the oyster soft its – Did quicken the pulse with a thrum, violate a rule of physics or two, qualify the quantifiable quirks? When leap twinnings in a tall bound: Do we rip off the string (of an aria in G)? Re-ice the altar boy? Re-scale the slide rule? No. We strip the metaphor down to her most un-subtle bare maxima, minima, respectfully applaud the obvious winna’ - raise the flag up the pole and quickly. What Patriots. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-02-06 17:49:24
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.61111
Superbly done my friend......nice structure, choice of words could not bring forth more then we saw.......images indeed keep popping up as one reads on and indeed what Patriots? Well, it was a superb game as well no matter what side you might have been for.......
We strip the metaphor down to her
most un-subtle bare maxima, minima,
respectfully applaud the obvious winna’ -
raise the flag up the pole and quickly.
What Patriots.
the above closing stanza indeed says it all.......thanks for posting and being such a grand part of this link. Be safe and God Bless, Claire
thanks for sharing your occupation with me and though I have been in surgery only once please know that I know how very important you are there by one's side especially during open heart surgery in which I was put on a machine for nine hours while I received a new aortic valve along with a triple by pass.......the Lord knows who to bless with such professions and gifts of poetry besides.