This Poem was Submitted By: Robin Ann Crandell On Date: 2004-01-12 15:36:57 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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I Sit Here

I sit here in the peacefulness  Of my own solitude I am here at my own expense Nobody to corrupt the thoughts  That are running so frantically Through my mind I sit here in the peacefulness of  The forest I am here at the world's expense Everybody to corrupt the beauty  Of the magnificant sight in front of me I am at a point in my life Where I'd rather not be Though there is nothing in my power That can change what I am about to do The destiny of my life is  Unchangable and I will have to  Deal with the chaos of the world's challenges Just to get the destiny that is mine Even if I do not want it I sit here in the peacefulness of my own self I am here at the expense of nothing I accept everything that happens in  My lifetime even if it is for the worst I will be stronger then my weakest link  I will accomplish my dreams  I will accomplish them on my own I will then be complete I will then be fulfilled I sit here in the peacefulness of nowhere I am here at nobody's expense I know only what I have taught myself  I know only what you have taught me I am striving for that knowledge That is what I yearn for  I deserve to have that knowledge And when the last piece of knowledge  Seeps slowly into my soul I will then be complete I will then have all I need I sit here in the peacefulness of peace Expense no longer exists I am complete  I am fulfilled I have no weak links I am complete  I am fulfilled I am at a point in my life where I deserve to be Where I have been striving to be I have accomplished my dreams  I yearn no more I am now complete I sit here in the peacefulness Of my own solitude.

Copyright © January 2004 Robin Ann Crandell

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2004-02-07 17:01:41
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.25000
Dear Robin, I'm able to easily relate to this piece - it's very thought inspiring and easy to read. The following verse had the most impact on me - sending out the message that we are responsible and able to fulfill our dreams if we really want to - alone without help from anyone. We know we learn from mistakes, and the worst of what happens to us does tend to make us stronger. You've said it in an imaginative and creative way. I sit here in the peacefulness of my own self I am here at the expense of nothing I accept everything that happens in My lifetime even if it is for the worst I will be stronger then my weakest link I will accomplish my dreams I will accomplish them on my own Your poem is very good and there is nothing I would do to change it. Thank you for a really nice read. DeniMari

This Poem was Critiqued By: Irene E Fraley On Date: 2004-01-25 11:00:16
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Hi Robin, I very much liked this poem. What struck me first was the way in which you used repetition to move the poem forward, and yet keep it tied together. The imagery is good, I cam picture the stages of growth that you are presenting to us. Congratulations on integrating all the stages of your growth so well. The movement, whether it takes place in one day's meditation, or years of living and experience, shows the path most of us take towards understanding ourselves and our relationship with ourselves, perhaps with our Creator, and the world in which we live. The use of language is simple and works for the poem, as one focuses on the movement of the poem, and not its words. Good writing. Irene Fraley
This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-16 17:56:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Wow. Please don't take from my analysis of the very effective method of this poem that I was not profoundly affected by it. I was. Thanks for writing it. I like the repeating method used here. It's very like a ballad, with a hook, in a way. You find yourself looking for the changes in each successive verse. I found myself crying at the end. Very effective and powerfully done. At first I found myself saying to the person in the poem to not give up, as they appeared be doing. Also the parts that are contradictory in the same verse lend power to the hoped-for transformation to come. The paradox of destiny and personal power to affect the largest things- even though they may be very negative- is a theme which resonates with me personally. It's the crux of living to me. Makes me wish I had written this poem. I cannot think of highest praise than that.
This Poem was Critiqued By: arnie s WACHMAN On Date: 2004-01-14 18:07:08
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.33333
The destiny of your life is changeable. Poet, I find this a tad long. I think you can tighten it up somewhat, but I won't give you a suggestion...it is your poem. I understand what you have gone through to write this. I cannot argue with your findings or feelings. I trust your thoughts are quiet now. Thanks for sharing.
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