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The Devil's Ballet D'Action with Cardinal Law In an act denied, he did the Devil, dancing but the better choice in revel , poised as portly partner pirouetting round demonic lie; then paused, regretting. Where was Cardinal Law? No scream? They hollered! Harm, you caused, more so than penguins, collared, to the children raped on blazing bedding blued in hazing hues awash on threading. Why were these men, many, bronzed, to languish on a linen stained through angel’s anguish? In thy eyes’ debris , chilled , lies the answer – hidden, empty guilt due cleric’s cancer. Wrought in winged apostle’s church, degraded, and burlesqued in ancient image, faded, a despair arises, viewing jester swirl around, as lies, proclaimed, still fester. Jesus Christ forewarned their fate, as mystic, at the least, condemning acts, sadistic, loading millstones carved in limestone, marbled fine on collared necks with voices, garbled. Pope John Paul, what manner of seer are thee? I was made a man, as thee, divinely…I, as well, know Godly paths to travel, that divide and fork while lives unravel. Long ago, on an embedded eon, when no time existed, absent Demon, God, at once, emerged from loving kindness and beheld the void in spite of darkness. Once beheld, He knew, and, being, acted; angels, first, before the world, distracted, made in airy ethos, at beginning, as companions through the silence, spinning. Then, came challenge, bold, from friendships, forceful - mindful, they, of actions, not remorseful; thus began the Plan, Divine, to battle Satan’s forces with agape’s rattle. By a tinctured process, pinched and seasoned, with schematic insight, wisely reasoned, God created “Bang!” in thought’s perfection, curling time ahead in deep reflection. Now, with judgement, nigh, amidst our writhing, comes a comic figure, seeking tithing, in the name of Jesus, lying lonely; Cardinal Law, one question, “Present, only?” |
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The Devil’s Ballet d’Action with Cardinal Law
In an act denied, he did the Devil,
Dancing but the better choice in revel,
Poised as portly partner pirouetting
Round demonic lie; then paused, regretting.
Where was Cardinal Law? No scream? They hollered!
Harm, you caused, more so than penguins, collared,
To the children raped on blazing bedding
Blued in hazing hues awash on threading.
Why were these men, many, bronzed, to languish
On a linen stained through angel’s anguish?
In thy eyes’ debris, chilled, lies the answer –
Hidden, empty guilt due cleric’s cancer.
Wrought in winged apostle’s church, degraded,
And burlesqued in ancient image, faded,
A despair arises, viewing jester
Swirl around, as lies, proclaimed, still fester.
Jesus Christ forewarned their fate, as mystic,
At the least, condemning acts, sadistic,
Loading millstones carved in limestone, marbled
Fine on collared necks with voices, garbled.
Pope John Paul, what manner of seer are thee?
I was made a man, as thee, divinely…
I, as well, know Godly paths to travel,
That divide and fork while lives unravel.
Long ago, on an embedded eon,
When no time existed, absent Demon,
God, at once, emerged from loving kindness
And beheld the void in spite of darkness.
Once beheld, He knew, and, being, acted;
Angels, first, before the world, distracted,
Made in airy ethos, at beginning,
As companions through the silence, spinning.
Then, came challenge, bold, from friendships, forceful –
Mindful, they, of actions, not remorseful;
Thus began the Plan, Divine, to battle
Satan’s forces with agape’s rattle.
By a tinctured process, pinched and seasoned,
With schematic insight, wisely reasoned,
God created “Bang!” in thought’s perfection,
Curling time ahead in deep reflection.
Now, with judgement, nigh, amidst our writhing,
Comes a comic figure, seeking tithing,
In the name of Jesus, lying lonely;
Cardinal Law, one question, “Present, only?”
copyright Robert Tremblay @ 2002
This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2004-02-04 09:10:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.77778
Robert:
I have NO idea how you manage to do these intricate pieces! This isn't a critique, as I'm at work and time's running out ... but I can't let this pass without at least commenting. The effort involved is tremendous, which I realize. The tough part would be not only to craft a shape that works, but to create the verbal component in a logical way. AND do it in IP. With rhyme, and consistent use of alliteration.
Loading millstones carved in limestone, marbled
Fine on collared necks with voices, garbled.
Great use of various consonants here! L/m/r ... even reading the line out loud imitates the garbled effect.
In the end, the isolated figure of Law, devoid of company and awaiting judgment, is both pathetic and repulsive. The initial "act denied" has led him to this place. A man of God does not avert his eyes when he knows that evil is being done. Those who stand by and fail to intervene are the devil's partners, for sure.
This may not be poetry to everyone's taste - for no poem can be all things to all readers - but it's undeniably sincere, unique and very difficult to execute.
Regards,
Brenda