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This Poem was Submitted By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2004-01-20 01:33:33 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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acrostic 2 (Prodigal Son)

People roam on destructive invitations God accepts lost souls Offers nests

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-02-07 09:15:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90000
Hi Erzahl, Sorry, this is a late critique. I just want to critique all your works before the end of the voting period. SMILE. This is an interesting second acrostic you have. You seemed you have mastered this form of poetry also. But of course, your japanese verses are PhD compositions. This one is religiously oriented, I mean, I can see your strong faith in God here. You have such great realization about God's existence and His manifestation to this world. Here, you have abridge the Biblical story of the Prodigal Son in just eleven words. People roam on destructive invitations ---- this is reality in the world. I too would admit that I attempted to succumb on desctructive invitations. But God is so good that He wants us realize those things we did. God accepts lost souls ---- God is really merciful and kind above all. He offers nests. Poetically said! I'm glad I was able to critique this before the time is up! Congratulations for your winning verse "japanese verse 36 (Ku Klux Klan)". Jordan

This Poem was Critiqued By: Sherri L Smith On Date: 2004-02-01 22:08:56
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.34615
Dear Erzahl, This is different from your haiku's and because it wasn't written straight down, at first I didn't get it. The more I read it and the more I looked at it, the better it got. Thank Heavens, God accepts lost souls, where would we be? We are so lost sometimes, just feeling our way around and lots of times, going down paths of destruction that we aren't even aware of. I pray each day, "Lord, direct my steps." Nice change, still very much an "Erzahl" poem. I am a fan! Sherri

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-01-24 18:55:46
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.46512
The Lord must have many prodigal sons for He is the one that gave us 'free will'allowing us to choose the path in life that we take and if by chance it brings us to a place we should not be hopefully we shall make the turn and know that the Lord does accept lost souls... love that line....God accepts lost souls.......can you see the gates of heaven opening to welcome all those lost souls.... He offers nests........a safe place to rest and come to know and love the true meaning of life within one's soul..... Oh Erzahl this is a beautful read with so many images that one cannot take it all in together....the majestic beauty of the Lord as he lets one go on their way then waits as a father only can do for the prodigal son or daughter to return..... thanks for posting and sharing this with us....as always your form is true to form and your words touch ones heart and soul. Be safe and God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mick Fraser On Date: 2004-01-22 08:57:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.77778
Give me the simple poem and I will make you king! Being a writer, it has always been my goal and belief that we can provoke the thoughts of more people if we craft brief but poignant messages. This is exactly what you have done here as this work could be read by various groups or cultures and be appreciated in many ways. Also, you don't have to be religious or even spiritual to enjoy this. Having recently been attracted to acrostic poems, you taught me that the economy of this type (one word per letter) provides a pleasing and fulfilling read in a short almost haiku way. I would not change a word. It is well done. Mick

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-01-22 08:53:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.90909
Dear Ezrahl, I've waiting for this #2 acrostic and you have not let us down with this. I don't know how you do it but you have managed to perfectly decribe the prodigal son with in the confines of this acrostic form far better then I ever would have thought posible. I like the use of the word "People" implying anyone can be a prodigal son and that is so true. All it takes is the reckless attitude. "Roam" is a perfect fit and ties into "destructive invitations". These invitations of satan are very self destructive, endangering the very soul of the prodigal son. "God Accepts Lost Souls"-- Praise His holy name! because He sure does and without his acceptance we would all be doomed to hell. This phrase built into your acrostic is such a perfect fit! Like I said before, Ezrahl, I don't know how you do it, but I sure am glad you do it. "Offers Nests"---Oh my Gosh, you have just given me my morning devotional!!!! Yes, He offers a place in His protective nest. Where we like baby birds are holding our mouths open and letting Him fill us. Thank you so much for this offering to the Lord. This is SWEET!!! Blessings, Jennifer

This Poem was Critiqued By: Turner Lee Williams On Date: 2004-01-21 10:25:44
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.66667
Erzahl--Glad to see your new acrostic. I enjoy your unique structure of this technical form: instead of all capitals for each letter in your title (traditional acrostic), you've chosen lower case and apt line breaks to impart a very pertinent message while still holding the essence of the words and theme of the entire piece. This is a brillant use of sparsity: not one wasted word/letter. Truely a case of less being more and you showing your versatility by capturing another peotic form with feeling. I hope this doesn't mean TPL will see less of your haiku-smile. Thanks for sharing your excellent effort with us. TLW

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-20 14:02:32
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.55556
Seems unfinished somehow to me. It misses the last beat of the point, or maybe it's a rhythm thing. Of course, this could have been the point, but I am unsure... I think I see where this was going, but not where it ended. Thanks, REEG!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2004-01-20 09:00:28
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.50000
you're getting so far into the realm of construction that I think I'll send nuts and bolts and a girder or two your way! Looking into the secrets of the mysterium alphabetum you will find no end to your misery. I suggest a milk bath with your lover and an oily massage. You'll feel better and write an opus in free verse. I'm waiting!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Kenneth R. Patton On Date: 2004-01-20 07:39:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
I could not pass by this without comment. In three brief lines you have described my life. It seems some of us have to try every door before seeing the obvious. Another masterpiece of brevity!!

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