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Can You (Still) Get That Over the Counter? -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well, Di- You were the cutest and the best. When we were younger than this, back before t-ball or big balls- that day you lost the pissing contest - besides the fact that had you been wearing shoes - they would have been wet – that day I knew. Now that we’re graying, bulging, sagging, and drinking from a bottle again, I’d like to say thank you, from a distance, and somewhat anonymously, behind a pen name and a publisher, and with a firm grip on the pen. Your introductory remarks and follow-up production were all I ever needed to know – I had no doubts after that, and even today - Wow! – can say that the thought of it – well – Maybe if I take two. And, thank you. Hope you’re well. And dry. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-01-28 15:40:31
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57377
Oh my Lord, you chuckled my hert with this one and your closing lines remind me of mother.....Hope your well and dry......well, no she is not but if you ask her she will tell you at 92 its her body and she can do what she wants.....there are days when I want to see if she can get over the counter again....hehehe....nasty.
Loved the images projected, the thoughts, the read, the structure and word flow....would not change a thing.....thanks for posting and sharing with us......be safe my friend, God Bless, Claire