This Poem was Submitted By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-21 16:50:50 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!To Listen to Music While Reading this Poem, just Click Here!
Click Here To add this poem to your "Voting Possibilities" list!
Mover What fun we can have in our bodies
without the constraints of outward looking...
our sense of ourselves is free of fears
with myself, my connection to God,
my shining body makes my happy tears
seem odd
closed, watering eyes to my personal window
fingers on the wing's bow
on my soul, the plucked harp string
O Joy !
sing
O Boy !
an open door
Give me more, yes more!
today is now, now is to say
just how...
let me show you now,
me !
with motions and sex and rest I can see!
my mind, an inner opera
and all the silent while
I feel fine...
I unleash a violent smile of
thought...movement
like in kind
"I once could see,
but now.. at last.. I'm blind.." |
|
Copyright © January 2004 Regis L Chapman
Additional Notes:
I also wrote an addendum to Mover, which I will include here, and after I will explain:
Impatient
but Ready
Reactionary
but Prepared
Impulsive
but Balanced
Strike,
then Rest
Point
Counterpoint
testing our betters
without foibles
without fetters,
in capital letters
hours to own
and set free
the seeds sown
are soon blown
from the young tree
like emotions
let go in direct
action
given no retrospect
or satisfaction
an aggressive stance
when given the chance
a pulling trigger
the moving figure
the motion is the thing
you do, then I do
a circle, a swing
this silent move
but quick!
so fast I'm almost sick
and the next
and next!
and again
'til our bones bend
and end of the day
saddens the slumping body
away
now in repose
a smile, I suppose
reluctant and dreaming
of tomorrow's quiet screaming
of maddening movement
heaven sent
all this complete
they who are athletes
we who run on the high ledge
unafraid of The Edge
This poem is about being an athlete, and what it's like to live that life for long periods of time, as I have. It talks also about the spiritual connection I felt throughout that time.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Robin Ann Crandell On Date: 2004-02-07 13:34:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.36364
Regis,
Wow! Great poem. Sorry, It's been a while since I have been reading. But, what a good poem
to welcome me back. To be honest,,,, I really thought you were talking about sex the whole time
but, mabye my mind is still on that subject... or athletes.... can like sex too. ;-)
Take Care Regis...
Robin.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-02-05 07:27:37
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.57692
Good structure, enjoyed the word flow and the images projected with the flare of your pen......
enjoyed the connection you placed with God as well..........indeed we have so much ability when we search from within and at times listen not to what is around us for they enjoy the restraints placed upon us by life situations themselves.......to be free with one's spirit and to enjoy the love it brings refreshes one's soul as well....
our sense of ourselves is free of fears
with myself, my connection to God,
my shining body makes my happy tears
seem odd
Thank you for posting and sharing this with us along with the one of the athlete.........what refreshing joy your soul must be in when you complete one of those marathons that are day long, so dueling with much taking place and only you and your God together carry it through. Again, thank you for posting, be safe and God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Jordan Brendez Bandojo On Date: 2004-01-24 17:57:34
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.95238
So, you have been an athlete, Reeg! The first thought that came into my mind when I
see the title are strength, agility, and endurance. You should have these kind of traits
if you are a MOVER! And these traits can be natural or acquired. This seems to give a
different kind of energy to critique today! SMILE!
You started this piece with a fact!
"What fun we can have in our bodies
without the constraints of outward looking..." ---this is not a matter of debate! It is universal.
Yup, I can see that this piece reflects your connection to God as you live as a MOVER.
The mention of God offers a thought that all our energy, action and responses towards
a certain stimulus or circumstance depends on our connection to God. Being a yoga you
have a strong foundation of spirituality I believe!
my shining body makes my happy tears seem odd ----- intriguing! this makes me pause and I having fun with the thought!
closed, watering eyes to my personal window
fingers on the wing's bow ----- I like the sound of 'w' here! It reinforce the idea of moving, dynamic!
And the association of plucking the harp string is just a manifestation of joy and
energy with God!
The metaphor of a mind being an inner opera is something new. And it suggests a deep thought.
With you ending in "quotation", I am satisfied to unleash my stress and seep more sinew.
Thanks for sharing, Reeg! You just give me a kind energy through your poem. I could not
suggest anything to improve this poem. For me this is a freedom of expression!
Jordan
Poetry Contests Online at The Poetic Link
Click HERE to
return to ThePoeticLink.com Database Page!