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This Poem was Submitted By: Mick Fraser On Date: 2004-01-23 22:55:04 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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Falling in Love with Food

Wide men say that we were once thin but I can't help falling in love with food Shall I bake Would it be a sin If I can't help falling in love with food Like the syrup flows, over ice cream Darling so it goes I need new dungarees Take my hand, take my whole wheat too For I can't help falling in love with food Like the syrup flows, over ice cream Darling so it goes I need new dungarees Take my hand, take my whole wheat too For I can't help falling in love with food For I can't help falling in love with food

Additional Notes:
First...I don't mean to offend anyone. Second..Written today at lunch as I watched the guy who hardly fit into a booth beside me eat his pizza. Third...To be sung to an Elvis tune....I know you can figure out which one...but if you are really young and don't know, please e-mail me and I'll tell you. Last....Sorry Weird Al...you can't have it.

This Poem was Critiqued By: Regis L Chapman On Date: 2004-01-26 17:22:38
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.21053
Both silly and timely. A blast from the past and up with current events all at once. I laugh picturing the King singing this- at his heaviest.... Thanks, REEG!

This Poem was Critiqued By: Debbie L Fischer On Date: 2004-01-25 14:33:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mick, As I hummed the great Elvis tune, I laughed my way through your poem. Sometimes it is nice to see the humor in life and here you show us just that. Well done and it brings laughter on this cold and icy day. Deb:)

This Poem was Critiqued By: Joanne M Uppendahl On Date: 2004-01-24 13:59:14
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.94118
Mick: You've got me on an Elvis kick! Did I start it with my puzzle poem and Heartbreak Hotel? If so, you've carried to a greater heights with this clever parody. I found a website which plays this song (the one your poem is based on) over and over, sung by HimSelf. I love this parody - and it has me laughing aloud - which is an odd thing to do as my husband pours over income tax forms. Wide men say that we were once thin but I can't help falling in love with food Shall I bake Would it be a sin If I can't help falling in love with food So funny! And true enough. Too, too true. Elvis himself seemed to share that same love in later years. Now I'm all nostalgic! (And it's your fault!) The line that first tickled my funny bone is "Shall I bake." Like the syrup flows, over ice cream Darling so it goes I need new dungarees Take my hand, take my whole wheat too For I can't help falling in love with food Then "I need new dungarees" cracked me up, followed by a hoot with "take my whole wheat too." Clever, funny and irreverent. I noticed that the food choices are high carbs. That, too, is nostalgic in this day of the Atkins diet fever. Thanks for a great good time! Joanne PS I'm hungry

This Poem was Critiqued By: Mell W. Morris On Date: 2004-01-24 13:57:10
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Mick: This is a wonderful parody of the old Elvis song which I well remember. Even the title made me laugh with "food" in lieu of you. "Wide men say that we once were thin but I can't help falling in love with food Shall I bake? Would it be a sin? If I can't help falling in love with food." Opening word, "wide," made me laugh and by the time I got to "bake", the tears were rolling down my face. What makes it even funnier to me is that Elvis probably would have preferred your version because he was truly in love with food. "Like the syrup flows, over ice cream....or "gently into me".... Darling, so it goes I need new dungarees ....your most hilarious line... Take my hand, take my whole wheat, too ...."wheat" caught me by surprise...a howl... For I can't help falling in love with food." Refrain repeated with an extra "For I can't help falling in love with food." This is the type of humor that makes me laugh aloud and my opinion has always been that humorous poetry is the most difficult to write and to be understood by the reader. I don't see how your poem could offend anyone unless there is some 12-step warrior group of obese persons about which I haven't heard. I wish I were as easily inspired by large people eating pizza...but that's the trademark of a true poet. Every thing and every one is fodder for his fertile brain and usually poets are somewhat observant as well. This reveals a sense of humor which is quite appealing, is a wonderful break from the usual poem posted, and deserves an award. (We need different categories to post our poems and a winner from each category). Kudos and best wishes, Mell

This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2004-01-24 11:02:21
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.42500
Mick....this is adorable and yes, I can hear Elvis singing it to his tune.........Can/t help falling in love with you pertains to food and righthly so in this cute little ditty.........I used to weigh 185 pounds though that was years ago and yes, I loved all food especially friend clams and chocolate ice cream and when pregnant together was superb......YUK....today I am trying to gain weight since I weigh a misely 85 pounds but there seems to be a problem....can't get my hands on those friend clams like I want to due to cardiovascular problems....hehehe.....14 heart attacks and open heart surgery will curve your lust for food though its there one should not put in mouth........love the visuals presented as well and I have seen many who could not get into a booth because of their size....Americans seem to have a problem with weight, but it does not bother them like it does others....thanks for posting, be safe and God Bless, Claire

This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-01-24 01:39:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.93333
Mick, you are too funny. No offense taken. I don't know if it's just late and I'm feeling giddy, but you're cracking me up. "Can't Help Falling in Love with You" is such a catchy tune, now I can't get your song out of my head. I'm sure Wierd AL would have done this is he had thought of it. :) Overeaters Anonymous will be in touch. They want to use this as their theme song. Actually, Mick, it is a sin. *smile* The sin of gluttony and half of America is overindulging. Thanks for the chuckle. Laughter is the best medicine. Blessings, Jennifer

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