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My teacher I could be one of her boys If I wasn’t already. There, lonely on the school bench, Wishing that she would see me, She stands out, orchid in bloom Against a concrete empire. My hair, too long and greasy Rattles like a squeaky door Getting wrong the attention I am desperate to compel. If she lets me pass by, now, I’ll be a melted icecream No longer with will or way To congeal into some great Adonis for her senses Or radio she’ll tune to For that perfect, perfect song I learnt while watching her go Watching me watching her go. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-06-06 08:43:17
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.62963
Hi Mark,
Oh the desperation of a boy in love with his teacher! When I was a senior in high
school a new music teacher was hired...even tho she was not much older than we were.
She was very attractive and I think all the boys fantazied about her and most of the
girls hated her. ....'she stands out, orchid in bloom against a concrete empire' like this
line ....'my hair too long and greasey, rattles like a squeaky door'...'getting wrong
the attention I wish to compel'...negative attention is better than no attention...even a
look or a smile directed at you would have been welcome!...'I'll be a melted icecream' this
line made me smile...so indicative young boy in love....'for that perfect, perfect, song I
learnt while watching her go'......ummmm'learnt' was she an english teacher?
'watching me go, watching me go.' Cute poem!
Peace....Marilyn