This Poem was Submitted By: Thomas Edward Wright On Date: 2004-06-17 10:04:46 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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To the Man Reading Melville on the Beach

                        Some things are best locked away.                         What the timbre of his voice pries open.                            What I hear this brown bird sing.                            This bird with his sunny song.                               Then the chatter of squirrels,                                 Their scratching running.                                    But it’s the interminable tapping,                                   That’s what’s driving me mad.                                      Sometimes, what I hear I pass along.                                       I heard, yesterday, on the radio,                                   On the way home from work,                                          In my car, traveling west at seven,                                                That Ulysses is best understood spoken aloud,                                                  And that this novel is now available on audio tape.                       so I listen to it while driving to                          and from work never having to sit next                          to odd dogs, or you on the bench in the park,                            not struggle with the lamp in the dark,                            not the weight of the book in my lap,                              nor the dark weight of Dublin hanging                                 from each black image he left us, yet ponder,                                     as I listen to the black words drip,                                      listen as mob hones its steely blades,                                      as Mrs. Bloom recounts her weathered life                                      as her vapid vocals a capella - sans comma – sans dash                      As if Bloom was a blind man –                      As if you were a blind man –                      As if you were Bloom and I Joyce                   And we were one mind struggling to free                  The one hopeful mouse from the trap,                 Better to hear another’s fitful dream,                 To witness her primal scream,                 To hear our white canes                  Tapping on those cellar doors.                 The scratching sounds late at night.                And other sounds I’ve forgotten,                  Struggled mightily to forget.                 And they rise in the dark                  With their now familiar voices                   In a theater built for one;                  And as the scenes hurry by                     I lust for your Melville, Captain Ahab,                      The crashing sea, the story of Ishmael,                     Don’t paint me dead or ask me why.                        I need a story with a strong beginning,                          Not a long dark drive into that dead end of his.                             Leave the book there on the bench and walk away.                                                                            I have a gun.

Copyright © June 2004 Thomas Edward Wright


This Poem was Critiqued By: Jennifer j Hill On Date: 2004-07-04 07:45:48
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.85714
T, careful with the gun talk, someone might think you're a republican. In this forum that's akin to suicide. Oh, very much enjoyed this poem. jj


This Poem was Critiqued By: Molly Johnson On Date: 2004-06-27 00:54:09
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.00000
Thomas, I think I heard the very same radio piece. I think too that there was an interview with the currator of the Joyce museum advising all of us who couldn't get past the first chapters to skip Steven and we'd be fine. How can it be the finest book ever written and no one has read it? I feel a literature lover's guilt at not being able to complete the epic. On to your poem: What I like most it the litany and repetition. I think they were artfully used to make a point and convey the annoyance (sp). The moments of humor in your narrative are smart and witty. At first I wasn't sold on the actual shape of the poem but it has the nature of an epic wander and I'm a fan of the choice now. As far as advice goes, you might take a look at the first stanza. Although it has a very Tell Tale Heart quality, some of your later lines serve the same purpose and placing the poem. The heaat is really in the later parts of the piece. What might it do to drop off that first stanza altogether? Just something to think about. Good luck and thanks for sharing, MollyJ
This Poem was Critiqued By: Terry A On Date: 2004-06-21 18:58:54
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
Oh wait... til you get to Finnegans Wake! J.J. had a way with words and a beautiful appreciation of the complexities of human interaction and by the way, so do you. Delightful poem. Terry
This Poem was Critiqued By: marilyn terwilleger On Date: 2004-06-19 14:38:55
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.63636
Hi Tom, I really got into this poem...with its wonderful sounds...both good and irritating too. I liked the brown bird singing a sunny song...chatter of the squirrels and even their scratching running was good for me. But the insistant tapping is driving you crazy..the sound or the person doing the tapping? And then you put me beside you in the car to and from work listening to Ulysses on tape so the weight of the book in your lap is not a problem...besides Ulysses is much better spoken than read. Even tho the black words drip and the mob hones its steely blades..then there is the thing with Bloom and Joyce...so far I am still enjoying this ride. It is, of course, better to hear anothers fitful dream, to witness her primal scream. Tapping canes, scratching sounds we will try to forget those. And all of a sudden you begin to lust...for Melville, Captain Ahab, the crashing sea and the story of Ishmael and then beg not to be painted dead. All you really want is a story with a strong beginning without having to trudge along into a dead end. I am starting to feel mighty uneasy about now...and Wham out of a clear blue sky you announce you have a gun! Well thanks for the ride but I think I will be going now. Loved this poem! peace...Marilyn
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2004-06-17 15:22:58
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 8.50000
Ho, Hmmmmm. The sparks are flying. There is a barnfire on the beach. The man is still reading his Melville, in the light of a fire, the way it was written. Apparently he didn't hear you, or he understood that the threat was but elaborate poetry. I've heard of being desperate for a smoke, or a drink, or . . . I shall cut short the debauched declension. But being desperate for a Melville? There should be another copy in your neighborhood somewhere. Prithee, put up the gun forever. Had you been listening to Finnegan's Wake, half of Minnesota would be gone by now. I haven't read literature in weeks. What i've been reading would be on the modernist counterpart to the Index librorum prohibitorum. I both envy your passion, and lament for your soul. You are either deranged, or a fallen angel. For a moment, I almost thought i was witnessing literary history, and not playing in a sandbox with other other toddlers. I don't think i ever made it past "bald he was, and a millionaire." Or the "ineluctable modality of the visible. " Or, "Jesus wept." If only one had time, and didn't need to feed one's own, and one's beloveds, mouth(s). But it's a mild, mild sky, Starbuck. Gimpy
This Poem was Critiqued By: Rachel F. Spinoza On Date: 2004-06-17 14:33:13
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Well, pat me on the head and call me Ishmael, but I flat adore this piece Some things are best locked away. What the timbre of his voice pries open. Ah, yes, What I hear this brown bird sing. This bird with his sunny song. Then the chatter of squirrels, Their scratching running. But it’s the interminable tapping, That’s what’s driving me mad. It’s the tap tap tapping of the squirrels squirrels squirrels Sometimes, what I hear I pass along. I heard, yesterday, on the radio, On the way home from work, In my car, traveling west at seven, That Ulysses is best understood spoken aloud, And that this novel is now available on audio tap . Yeah but don’t try to read the Molly Bloom monologue changing lanes so I listen to it while driving to and from work never having to sit next to odd dogs, Aren’t all dogs a little odd? or you on the bench in the park, not struggle with the lamp in the dark, not the weight of the book in my lap, nor the dark weight of Dublin hanging from each black image he left us, yet ponder, as I listen to the black words drip, listen as mob hones its steely blades, as Mrs. Bloom recounts her weathered life as her vapid vocals a capella - sans comma – sans dash san dash sans clothes sans – everything As if Bloom was [were] a blind man – As if you were a blind man – As if you were Bloom and I Joyce Wah ...I don’t wanna be mollyfied And we were one mind struggling to free The one hopeful mouse from the trap, Hold still – I’ll get it Better to hear another’s fitful dream, To witness her primal scream, To hear our white canes Tapping on those cellar doors. With the bottoms of out trousers rolled- wearing purple The scratching sounds late at night. And other sounds I’ve forgotten, Struggled mightily to forget. And they rise in the dark With their now familiar voices In a theater built for one; [great, great allusion] And as the scenes hurry by I lust for your Melville, Captain Ahab, The crashing sea, the story of Ishmael, Don’t paint me dead or ask me why. I need a story with a strong beginning, Not a long dark drive into that dead end of his. Leave the book there on the bench and walk away. I have a gun. Oh you, MAN, you. But wait – read the old man in the sea again – the creature is smaller and more do-able
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