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After the Coda For Gary Wilmot "protector of truth and justice fallen by the cold reality of nature" He lives in a place where Ideas meet face to face: At the blunt end of phrase, Looking back upon itself, Forward into the next, Into the Future, Into Responsibility, Into Tomorrow. He governs that spot With an iron mind; Whips us with words And force of argument, Not mindless violence. His world matters. Honesty is the leader Of his valiant band. We are never quite As good as we are When he is leading The march, are we? He lives in that space where Ideals hang on walls, Where time meets form, Where imagery is born, Where the saddle meets the stately mane Of a long lean stallion clip-clopping home. Soon we’ll turn the boot in the stirrup. Soon we’ll burn another faggot on the fire. I know that he’d be concerned about why. Once again I’ll likely not have an answer. He made one think about wood; and yet About Would, that, I think, is his legacy. What would you do? That’s his cornet blaring in the distance. Ever forward, friend. Ever forward. We will be there soon. And over the Warm fire we will share an ale And begin again to tell the tale Of that space, just after the comma, Just before the next breath, There - and then. |
Additional Notes:
To a remarkable human being in his time of pain. All the best, Gary.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Erzahl Leo M. Espino On Date: 2004-07-18 21:11:40
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Thomas,
I just drop by to say how great this is! For me this is one of your best work (of course my favorite is still “martins”)! Pardon me for not critiquing this last month, I just can’t help not to comment…(it is better late than never). My vote was all in this one!
Everything you did here is in high-caliber! From lyrics, subjects, metaphors, structure, they are all woven in one excellent pen. Everything is well posited! The message is so striking, unforgettable, inspiring! I know…that was your secret weapon, you were inspired by this “remarkable human being”, to Mr. Gary Wilmot. See, how a great poet released its full potential and can be inspired by such a great poet too!
I am sure, Gary is very much delighted on the offering…this is too much from what he can expect…Brilliant!
“He lives in a place where
Ideas meet face to face:
At the blunt end of phrase,
Looking back upon itself,
Forward into the next,
Into the Future,
Into Responsibility,
Into Tomorrow.”
--- Great intro! Profundity weighs is so heavy! Enjoyable!
--- That last three “Into” is so creative!
“He governs that spot
With an iron mind;
Whips us with words
And force of argument,
Not mindless violence.”
--- The “w” alliteration adds beauty.
--- Your superior imagination radiates!
“His world matters.
Honesty is the leader
Of his valiant band.
We are never quite
As good as we are
When he is leading
The march, are we?”
--- You simple truths are so striking! It keeps on pounding through my thoughts.
“He lives in that space where
Ideals hang on walls,
Where time meets form,
Where imagery is born,
Where the saddle meets the stately mane
Of a long lean stallion clip-clopping home.”
--- Wow, incredible! How I wish I could write like this! :)
“Soon we’ll turn the boot in the stirrup.
Soon we’ll burn another faggot on the fire.
I know that he’d be concerned about why.
Once again I’ll likely not have an answer.
He made one think about wood; and yet
About Would, that, I think, is his legacy.
What would you do?”
--- Again, striking truths…that says a lot of Gary and you as a lyrical artist!
That’s his cornet blaring in the distance.
Ever forward, friend. Ever forward.
We will be there soon. And over the
Warm fire we will share an ale
And begin again to tell the tale
Of that space, just after the comma,
Just before the next breath,
There -
and then.
--- Awesome! Your words just can heal and sooth Gary’s pain.
--- This is a wonderful dedication for a dear friend! You words just gave justice to his existence!
Nothing I can add for this brilliant work! This is such a rare piece and I’m glad I was able to read it! Thanks Thomas for sharing your talent with us in TPL! Kudos and kudos!
As always,
Erzahl :)