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Sins of the Mother My Other, I think From first, As if I were another One of your own Unrecallably obscene gestures, I knew to shrink, from you, where others Would rise to applause above their caws Of infant joy. That threw me, To this day. Who snaked into you To bear me? Heedless, you obliged And heaved, And writhed, and moaned While I listened, Suspended dumb, founded now Inside your bilious moat. You did not smile, Eve, That evening I first Was. God had it so, And so marked me With your bloodiness. These are the Generations of Cain. Purely unclean, I need not speak. The righteous know me from a distance And they retreat. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Latorial D. Faison On Date: 2005-06-07 22:28:27
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.91489
This is wild as wild can be Mark, straight from the garden, and I love it. Yet another allegorical piece that takes me back to the garden. What I love most about this one is all of the word play and word phrases that you have displayed throughout this poem.
You get raw with Eden, and you tie the first birth into your own birth, another interesting thing about this poem and lots of your poetry.
I felt like I was on a roller coaster reading this one enduring bobs, weaves, twists and loops. You take us for a ride, but you make biblical and philosophical analyses that are so profound here.
SINS OF THE MOTHER run deep, from Cain to you to me.
Great poem.
Latorial
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