This Poem was Submitted By: Mandie J Overocker On Date: 2005-06-22 16:20:03 . . . Click Here To Mail this Poem to a Friend!

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The Healing

Communication board brings forth sun spun soul trapped between earthen plane and heaven’s stars two kindred spirits offer assistance blindly in the chasm deep chasing demons near and far full moon rising on summer solstice an opportunity so rare hurry quick no time to spare burning sage release the prisoner caught betwixt two worlds healing light surrounds the girls wafts of smoke tickle the spirits embracing for eternity heaven bound body be  whose daughter watches as she waits to witness demons casting out from mom everlasting lonely here, but hopeful still she waves goodbye for now turns toward two earth bound souls who hold her close in warm embrace an other worldly fragile bow move her to tomorrow’s shoals where salty tears from oceans flow to give scarred heart slight reprieve to see her mom if she believes

Copyright © June 2005 Mandie J Overocker

Additional Notes:
A friend and I created a communication board (similar to Ouija board) and in our experimentation were contacted by a pour soul trapped between heaven and earth. Under her guidance and with the help of her daughter's spirit, we were able to set her free. This was penned the morning after as I reflected on the experience.

This Poem was Critiqued By: DeniMari Z. On Date: 2005-07-05 18:30:33
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.54167
Dear Mandie, This poem brings back fond memories, of the Quija board and how we used to love to fool around with it. My son still has one here at home, and now and again we pull it out just to pass time. I have to admit, we never made contact with anyone, just played and asked it mindless questions for entertainment purposes only. The fact that you may have communicated with a lost soul, brings Sylvia Brown to mind - just thought I'd mention it. Your poem has good descriptive imagery and the presence of a spiritual quality that could light up anyones imagination. Sincerely, DeniMari

This Poem was Critiqued By: Elaine Marie Phalen On Date: 2005-07-01 11:59:42
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 10.00000
Hi Mandie, What an intriguing poem! Not only is the story of great interest to me - being the seeker that I am - but the harmonious use of sonic combinations really enhances the read. I love "sun spun soul", for instance, with all the sibilant alliteration. And again, here: "wafts of smoke tickle the spirits/embracing for eternity" - more soft consonants, and the unexpectedness of "tickle" to add energy. The speaker and her companion are appropriately viewed as karmic sisters, balancing the daughter's own presence but not pulling against it. They are the two poles between which this woman's spirit must move for its journey. who hold her close in warm embrace ... more lovely soft-c and s sounds; this speaks of gentleness and peace an other worldly fragile bow ... I love the potential for several meanings of "bow"! move her to tomorrow’s shoals ... wonderful use of the "o" assonance, and the shoals offer a haven where salty tears from oceans flow ... interesting that the oceans themselves are seen to cry, rather than being composed of the tears collected from a living source; this is the water element from which we all arise The "bow" line is extremely subtle. If it's the "ribbon" it implies a knot, like the symbol for eternity itself, but fragile because at anymoment the strand can break. If it is the "bow" of a ship, as rhymes with "now" or "prow", then it suggest a barque which bears the soul across the final river - the Styx, perhaps - to the realms of the blessed. It could also be the sort of bow that means a salutation, a gesture of respect performed by the two women who have released her. I like the tercet form you've used, and the rhyme is nicely unpredictable - not always in the same pattern - which parallels the surprising events of the experience itself. Is this something you've done before? I don't mean necessarily this particular type of communication, but the attempt itself? I've been exploring many concepts of the afterworld since my mother's death in November, as I would dearly love reassurance that we do go on and that she is all right in her new form. But so far, nothing seems to come except odd coincidences that might or might not mean anything. You have performed a service, I think, that will count much in the overall scale of things. I feel as if I've been meant to read this piece. I have been offline much of the time recently, owing to personal circumstances, so it's perhaps another one of those coincidences that upon my return, this piece tops my to-critique list. Thank you! Brenda
This Poem was Critiqued By: Claire H. Currier On Date: 2005-06-25 18:34:20
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.92308
What an experience this must have been for you and your be able to help this soul trapped between heaven and earth...........good structure, word flow makes for a nice read, allowing images to come forth as one travels down the lines have made it possible poet to see the soul being set free to continue on its journey to heaven......thank you for posting and sharing with us, God Bless, Claire
This Poem was Critiqued By: Lora Silvey On Date: 2005-06-22 16:29:35
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.48837
Mandie, What an unusual piece and a comfortable read, well structure, great imagery. Your explanation was nice to know for whom and why you penned this however, your story was great. Oh so many mysteries in heaven and on earth, how closed we can be, and great that you protected yourself before embarking on such a precarious journey. Safe travels. Lora
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