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West of the Sun There were valets queuing Cadillacs - Actually, they were horses, unsaddled. One sidled up to me on the edge of that Abyss and with a soft kiss, One night when the stars were lone, And with a Texan’s demeanor (I swear) She sized me up for dinner and drinks And I think – here salmon fail, or swim – How steep that climb! Night never guessed. This moonscape lost shape and flew. Gods were invoked, goddesses spoke. One and one made - for a sec - too Blue. The very color of remorse doused with bliss. Red. The hue of life. Might light bless that, later this. The clip-clop of shoes on the drive Reminds like a clock that it’s five; And I’m walking with that on my mind, Straight into the sun. Or what’ll be left When she sets. |
Additional Notes:
She knows how to ride.
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Andrew Hislop On Date: 2005-11-17 03:58:22
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 1.00000
TEW
I can't believe I was so ignorant an SOB as to overlook this when originally posted.
I must have been too busy swimming up for some spawning myself.
This deserved better. Maybe you should post it again this month.
While the Titans are in town.
MAH