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Taking your leave Before I fix these thoughts, these private alchemies, alloy subtle suppositions to a plan and perhaps—perhaps—to an action, I pause before I think and think these thoughts aloud, again, and snatch back the coarser echoes, again speak them so, much slower, softer, and be satisfied that, still—yes still they must be said. So, what do I do when, finally, I do discover my deepest truth after a lifetime diving blind? How cursed this blessing is if you who blooded my lungs must now be left behind. What do I do? If my truth is not the truth you want for you, what then? How can I now be true when I discover you are unlike me, just as you said? I thought you were out to break my heart with that news, instead you strangely kept it whole and knew that, savage as motherhood, this love may not be yours to keep. Could you be true to you had you not? And what if I do not listen, now? But now, perhaps, I find that you were right. Pleased? As the punch that ends a fight, wretched for all the wrong reasons. You said it, you have said it all these years, yet now it snatches at my throat, a suicide sip of unalloyed freedom, released by a cyanide, the kind you simply can’t be sure you really want to find. And yet you really must take it. Or so it seems. |
This Poem was Critiqued By: Mark Steven Scheffer On Date: 2005-12-06 11:17:36
Critiquer Rating During Critique: 9.20455
MAH,
This is a pill i pray I never have to imbibe. My sympathies.
The ending was a nicely wound up ball of misery.
MSS